Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having privacy in Personal life is one of the crucial needs of all individuals. Famous figures are no exception, so they need to have some time to feel freedom in their lives. There is a controversial question about whether these people should have more privacy than they have now or not. Personally, I'm a person who not only needs this extra privacy but also their family maybe more. I have two reasons for my viewpoint, both of which will be mentioned in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, after a preoccupied week each body needs a relaxed and peaceful weekend to spend time with his wife and beloved kids. Now put your feet in an actor's shoe. Is it possible to have such a weekend with your family if lots of individuals surround you and ask you to take a photo? I have a cousin who is a professional actor who earns several awards in relation to film and theater. When we gather together he always complains about his personal life, and he also says his relationship with his son is affected. Because they can't spend some time together in the park without the presence of their fans, which is really bothering. I think if we like these celebrities we ought to respect their lives and give them some time to have fun with their family as we all do in our personal lives.
Secondly, having a good performance in any career requires a mindset that focuses on that specific field. If we are a fan of a particular club and expect them to win most of their matches, we must make it a condition for the players to give all their energy to play for the team and make us happy with their championship. Nowadays, the most common phenomenon that every player is struggling with is rumors about them, most of which come from fans. In this situation, they can not only focus on their performance but also waste their precious time to answer the press question and tell the truth about those ridiculous lies. I remember David Beckham was one of the famous football players who always faced some news about his personal life which made him angry. Whenever I started reading a newspaper I saw some hot news about his relationship and other aspects of his personal life. thereby, his performance was affected because he was unable to consider only his plays and ended up with his weak plays in his final match before quiet football.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments I think celebrities such as actors and football players need far more privacy in their lives in order to have a better relationship with their family and also accurate performance. From now on, let's try to give them this chance because the more focus they have on their career, the more joyful moments we will have.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
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Line 2, column 534, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... with his son is affected. Because they cant spend some time together in the park wi...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thereby
...and other aspects of his personal life. thereby, his performance was affected because h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, i think, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60082304527 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48288012778 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508230452675 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2694628093 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.476190476 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220668260274 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779147941691 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658877485199 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164018400484 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750126459621 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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