Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:
There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence
Music is also an asset of a nation. In the day and age we live, research has reported variety of music on the earth. There are never ending debates such as What is the purpose of music? Native music of a country outweighs international music?. In my perspective, Traditional music is extremely important than other music. Because, it is another way of traditional heritage representation. In the following essay, we will discuss both the argument with some possible proof before reaching a concrete decision.
Indeed, international music it is one more example of westernization. There are many songs such as Pop, rock played in leisure places such as gym, café etc. Because these songs precisely, playing a Rock or a fast beat song at gym motivates people to exercise. However, it cannot be represent as a traditional music of the nation. For instance, Star Bucks in Delhi, India may play pop songs for its customers. Nonetheless, India being impeccable in Carnatic music at worldwide, may not include electric music in its list.
On the flip side, while some argue, traditional music is very important. Current generation, always look for some retreat. In other words, they are interested mix and match of rhythmic music. Thus, recent statistics report explains, a group of musician has introduced a hybrid music to tangle traditional and western in the form of techno-classic music.
In my opinion, I neither support to Traditional music nor International music, that two group argue. Nevertheless, traditional music depicts the symbol of a country. It represents the beauty of music has evolved over the period of years till-date. Therefore, we could enjoy the foreign music for an interim enjoyment but it cannot be tagged as a native music.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 323, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s extremely important than other music. Because, it is another way of traditional herit...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, look, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12891986063 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95680682507 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609756097561 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0975394453 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.0952380952 106.682146367 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6666666667 20.7667163134 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356308629865 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121560084768 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788628989462 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235997581901 0.151304729494 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875859435519 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.88 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 323, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s extremely important than other music. Because, it is another way of traditional herit...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, look, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12891986063 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95680682507 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609756097561 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0975394453 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.0952380952 106.682146367 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6666666667 20.7667163134 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356308629865 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121560084768 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788628989462 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235997581901 0.151304729494 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875859435519 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.88 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.