the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
I absolutely believe that the best way for a society to train young people for leadership is not only by inculcating them in a sense of cooperation, but also competition.
Cooperation is a great way of developing the abilities of the novices to communicate with different teams. It has been so vital that nothing could be done without cooperation. For example, in a typical car manufacturing plant, the workers have to work together to complete a car assembly. The designers make the prototypes of the cars, and the workers implement accordingly and then the machine operators execute the assemble instructions to complete the procedure of the manufacture. Thus, these coordination or cooperation has been so crucial in today’s society.
Additionally, competition is inevitable in today’s society, by competition, we could clearly see their strength in these candidates, only the strongest with leading capability could be selected, and it not only convinces of other people, but also a positive stimulus for those who would like to climb up in the company hierarchy. For example, the current leader of TSMC (Taiwan Semiconductor Manufacturing Cooperation), Mr. Liu, is also promoted from the competition among many departments, because of his outstanding performance and leadership during his high level manager period. And that’s why TSMC has dominated the semiconductor manufacturing position and continued winning the biggest pie of the market, even the leadership transferring from Morris to Liu.
Opponents may argue that competition induces a lot of political cultures which makes people to avoid responsibilities upon the failure of project or of task. They are likely to have negative competition under table and bickering may be harmful to the enterprise. Even though under table competition is inevitable in the process of the competition, it still could be considered positively. Because the competition of the society or business is crucial and young people eventually have to ideal with the realities, and the competition is exactly the best way to train them to become more mature for the future leadership in the company. Moreover, the leadership is indispensable to have the ability so as to handle the treacherous business negotiation. For example, in Taiwan, there are many IT(intellectual technology) companies in the competition and some of them are trying steal the opponents’ engineers for the advanced technologies. While the internal competition within a company is basically not making a mistake reviled by others and make great contribution to the enterprise in the meanwhile. Therefore, comparing the toughness to run business as a leadership, the competition of internal company is quite moderate and it’s a great opportunity for young people to gain the capability and develop their career.
In conclusion, not only the competition, but also the cooperation could nourish young people and let them develop their strength for the future leadership based on the factors and examples mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2566.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43644067797 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2387159643 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493644067797 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 828.0 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7224805104 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.555555556 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2222222222 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381784435579 0.243740707755 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115126355373 0.0831039109588 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129144913927 0.0758088955206 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243648230314 0.150359130593 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147515875345 0.0667264976115 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 48.8420337079 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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