The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in
business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because
it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would
attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's
book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national
census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten.
Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal
Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in
order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the
recommendation.
The above passage is from the recommendation by the Board of Directors of Monarch Books. Here they are suggesting the book store to introduce a cafe inside their store to increase customers. But, before applying such extreme recommendation there are some questions which must be answered.
Such as, the Board of member is advising to discontinue its children section and make space for the cafe. But, as we don't know that from past twenty years the customer are attracted to which section of the library, taking such measure may reduce the rate of customers rather than increasing. To illustrate, If the Monarch Books is popular in the community for their huge collection of children books or the majority of customers coming to the stores are children, then discontinuing the section will hamper the Monarch books reputation. Hence, further analysis is required related to the type of customer coming to the book store and the type of books that are mostly sold.
Moreover, Board of members are making these suggestion based on the national census that indicates the decline in the percentage of under ten population. Here questions like where the data is taken from? which year this data is related to? Will the decline remain consistent for next coming years or change? must be answered. Because for example, if the decline is related to previous 10 years the applying such recommendation now based on this data is irrelevant, as the data is too old to be taken for consideration. Similarly is the data is old then there are chances that the decline will surely change and then removing the children section will bring more downfall in the customer foot-count that today.
Board of member are also comparing this scenario with the Regal Books who have recently opened the cafe in the bookstore. But this does not imply that they are attracting more customers in their shop. We must raise the questions like what was the count before they opened the cafe? What is the count of customers now? Are they making any profit by doing so? It is the questions like this which help us t better analysis the effect of any remedy before we imitate the same.
Hence, therefore the questions like these related to the discontinuing of children section, Validity of the census and Comparison to Regal Books which must be answered by the Boards of Director before any such recommendation is implemented.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 42, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'discontinuing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'advise' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: discontinuing
...uch as, the Board of member is advising to discontinue its children section and make space for...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 117, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...and make space for the cafe. But, as we dont know that from past twenty years the cu...
^^^^
Line 2, column 519, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'books'' or 'book's'?
Suggestion: books'; book's
...ing the section will hamper the Monarch books reputation. Hence, further analysis is ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 573, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "required related" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'relating' or 'to be related'.
Suggestion: relating; to be related
...on. Hence, further analysis is required related to the type of customer coming to the b...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this suggestion' or 'these suggestions'?
Suggestion: this suggestion; these suggestions
... Moreover, Board of members are making these suggestion based on the national census that indic...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...ions like where the data is taken from? which year this data is related to? Will the ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Must
...istent for next coming years or change? must be answered. Because for example, if th...
^^^^
Line 3, column 519, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
... too old to be taken for consideration. Similarly is the data is old then there are chanc...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, then, therefore, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92345679012 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63051164713 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456790123457 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 65.2141770544 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9523809524 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308505542579 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837247010751 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738222378782 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169352326427 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758003027507 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 42, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'discontinuing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'advise' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: discontinuing
...uch as, the Board of member is advising to discontinue its children section and make space for...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 117, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...and make space for the cafe. But, as we dont know that from past twenty years the cu...
^^^^
Line 2, column 519, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'books'' or 'book's'?
Suggestion: books'; book's
...ing the section will hamper the Monarch books reputation. Hence, further analysis is ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 573, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "required related" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'relating' or 'to be related'.
Suggestion: relating; to be related
...on. Hence, further analysis is required related to the type of customer coming to the b...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this suggestion' or 'these suggestions'?
Suggestion: this suggestion; these suggestions
... Moreover, Board of members are making these suggestion based on the national census that indic...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...ions like where the data is taken from? which year this data is related to? Will the ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Must
...istent for next coming years or change? must be answered. Because for example, if th...
^^^^
Line 3, column 519, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
... too old to be taken for consideration. Similarly is the data is old then there are chanc...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, then, therefore, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92345679012 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63051164713 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456790123457 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 65.2141770544 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9523809524 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308505542579 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837247010751 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738222378782 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169352326427 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758003027507 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.