Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The natural habitats or wilderness areas are as important as the cities, as it is the home to the animals, just like we need the shelter to live even the animals rely on their habitats. I strongly agree with the view that states - Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain. The following two examples are the reasons why this statement is agreeable.
Firstly, many natural birds and animals are getting extinct as they have lost their habitats. Moreover, we see most of the news are flooded with the headlines stating that the animals from certain forests (which are no longer left, as humans have used them for their benefits by damaging their habitats) have been seen in the cities. Of course when humans destroy the habitats of those animals, they have no home to live and can further harm humans, or may come to cities in search of their habitats. Only if we consider to preserve the habitats of the animals, it will not only save their home but also help in environmental balance.
Secondly, if the area is developed for economic gain, it will however cause bad effect on the natural environment in the future. Example, if the wilderness area is replaced by a chemical industry, by destroying the wildlife habitat, the city will in near future face hazardious effects due to pollution. The ecological balance will be lost as there is no natural area or forest(s) left, and it may also cause serious health issues to the people living nearby. However, if it forest area is left unchanged, it will not cause harm as it would do if it was to be replaced by any industry, as explained above.
Of course some might suggest that for the better economy, wilderness areas could be used and the nation can gain profit through it, but is the an efficient solution in long term? Humans are dependent on nature, and hence for we need to preserve it for longer run, because if the natural balance is disturbed, it might eventually affect the humans, as humans are dependent on it.
- According to a recent report cheating among college and university students is on the rise However Groveton College has successfully reduced student cheating by adopting an honor code which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeav 52
- Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take 66
- Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state even if these areas could be developed for economic gain Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position 62
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 511, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider preserving'.
Suggestion: consider preserving
...in search of their habitats. Only if we consider to preserve the habitats of the animals, it will no...
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Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bitat, the city will in near future face hazardious effects due to pollution. The...
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Line 3, column 475, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'forests'?
Suggestion: forests
...he people living nearby. However, if it forest area is left unchanged, it will not cau...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d by any industry, as explained above. Of course some might suggest that for th...
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Line 4, column 142, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: the; an
...tion can gain profit through it, but is the an efficient solution in long term? Humans...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, as to, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 365.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70684931507 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43475738764 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498630136986 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.5433993517 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.153846154 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0769230769 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69230769231 5.21951772744 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357369516181 0.243740707755 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131411419183 0.0831039109588 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15208973783 0.0758088955206 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232739888 0.150359130593 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147002389218 0.0667264976115 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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