The argument is flawed in some areas. Firstly the argument nowhere mentioned whether the local charities are in need of help with their services. It is nice to take the initiative to make the students well rounded and charitable members of the society But, What if local charities are already getting the sufficient help from the members of the community and there is no need of any extra hands. In such situation how are the students going to complete their graduation requirements which mentioned them to work for at least 8 hours per month for a total of 9 months and how the students are going to learn social responsibility. The argument just assumed that the charities are need of support in such case only it becomes valid.
The second issue with the argument is, it didn't mention anywhere on how the University of Wabash is going to keep track of the number of hours the student worked in a particular charity and they didn't say anything about if the students are going to get any credits or grade for their work-so that they can show to their future employees on how socially responsible they are. And what about the timings during which the students can work is it going to be during school hours or after school hours or maybe during weekends it is nowhere mentioned in the argument. The argument vaguely just said it is a requirement and needs to be completed but didn't give any further details.
The other issue with the argument is whether the University is going to allot the students into the local charities on their own randomly on basis of needs of charity or the students have any heresy on what charity they can work on, is not mentioned in the argument. Maybe there are some students who want to teach to the children of local schools ,some want to work to keep the community hygienic,some maybe want to feed the poor likewise there many charitable works that student wants to work on so is the University going to consider these interests.
The idea of building a responsible citizen of the society is great but the argument needs to give further details on how this is going to possible keeping in mind interests of everyone.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1749 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.531 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.43 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.609 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.426 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.625 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 43, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e second issue with the argument is, it didnt mention anywhere on how the University ...
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Line 2, column 196, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...worked in a particular charity and they didnt say anything about if the students are ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 645, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...quirement and needs to be completed but didnt give any further details. The other i...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...o teach to the children of local schools ,some want to work to keep the community ...
^^
Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , some
...t to work to keep the community hygienic,some maybe want to feed the poor likewise th...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, likewise, may, second, so, well, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 382.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64659685864 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48553971563 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.431937172775 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.6292460864 57.8364921388 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.363636364 119.503703932 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.7272727273 23.324526521 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16579508477 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616163476139 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588417198562 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0978446152523 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512128970385 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.3550499002 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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