Tpo 34-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. Use specific reasons and examples ….
Nowadays, it has become a heated debate whether children’s educating processes are a more difficult task than before or not. Some people hold the opinion that children spend more time on cell phones and social networking in a way that they can’t focus on their studies; however, others have different attitudes. Today, technology has strongly improve the way we get information. Students can get more information, get it more quickly, and more conveniently. Considering these positive features of technology, children's educating processes have had significant upward promotion compared to the past. In the following, I will elaborate more on is issue.
First, today, new generation benefits from facilities and equipment more than the past. The Internet and world wide web has opened every major library and data base to students around the world. For example, students can easily get audio and video data, they do not have to spend hours poring over (looking for) card catalogs in the library and looking at the shelves, and their research studies can be done instantly on the web. In the past, anyone limited to some determined books and references. Recently, we have been equipped and upgraded to access any references and books. In such circumstances, parents and teachers have many options for educating children, and it can be concluded that, educating children is not as difficult as in the past. Although these remarkable points that technology have brought to us have been accompanied with some negative consequences in students’ lives, such as spending too much time on cell phones and online games, the advantages of access to technology outweigh the disadvantages.
Second, in recent years, teachers have been trained to teach according to children interests. They use a wide variety of applications and vivid animations in a way that influence children. Children are easily attracted by colorful photos and cartoon characters. Many educational organizations, filmmakers, and writers use features of entertainment colorful photos and cartoon in animated images and educational videos to convey many educational materials and subjects to children. In the past, no one could even imagine that in the future students can learn course materials and subjects in enjoyment manner. Their Educational world was constrained just to stilted education and stiffly formal methods.
In conclusion, regarding the points mentioned above, not only has educating children been improved and lead to easier task than the past, but also it have succeeded to attract more children to education. It seems that, it is parents and teachers duty to teach children how use and benefit from modern technology in a way that never waste their time and energy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 344, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'improved'.
Suggestion: improved
...titudes. Today, technology has strongly improve the way we get information. Students ca...
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Line 2, column 294, Rule ID: OVER_LOOKING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'overlooking'?
Suggestion: overlooking
... they do not have to spend hours poring over looking for card catalogs in the library and lo...
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Line 3, column 562, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to course'
Suggestion: to course
...e that in the future students can learn course materials and subjects in enjoyment man...
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Line 4, column 151, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
... easier task than the past, but also it have succeeded to attract more children to e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34101382488 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8611648516 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534562211982 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.34471944 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.380952381 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262387201055 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744280419509 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049121565113 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162987788632 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035653827476 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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