The city of Winston has two large department stores Namen and Roscoe Namen is known for its high end designer fashions while Roscoe is known for more affordable fashion options Both Namen and Roscoe are each considering opening another store in the gr

The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. The Namen departmental stores make an assumption that the denizens of Salem are going to spend on opulent designer fashions whereas the Roscoe department stores assume that the suburbs are more family-oriented and thus profitable than their peers.

Firstly, the argument fails to consider the already present departmental stores in Salem. It is possible that there is a department store which offers high-end designer fashions at a lower rate than Namen. There is no reason for the denizens of Salem to either switch to Namen and Roscoe as they already have a better alternative. A thorough survey needs to be done on the already existing departmental stores.

Further, Namen's argument that people are going to spend on ostentatious designer fashion and Rascoe's argument on the undergird that the city if Salem has a medium-income of $75,000, is seriously flawed. If there are hundred people in the city and fifty of them have an income of $1 and fifty of them have an income of $10000 that would make the medium income a little over $5000. It is possible that the fifty per cent of the population is opulent and the other fifty indigents. This is not beneficial to both Roscoe and Namen. Medium income is not the correct gauge to make predictions that the people are going to shop at their respective stores. Mode income and also the average income must be taken into account in this case.

After taking the aforesaid points into account, it can be observed that the argument fails to be compelling at its best and disingenuous at its worst. The size of the store and their required revenue to thrive should also be addressed explicitly. A proper survey of the people living in the suburbs of Salem should also be conducted to know whether the people are more family-oriented or are more lavish in their lifestyle. It can further be improved by taking into considerations the heretofore mentioned suggestions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...esigner fashion and Rascoes argument on the undergird that the city if Salem has a medium-inc...
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Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...,000, is seriously flawed. If there are hundred people in the city and fifty of them ha...
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Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...city and fifty of them have an income of and fifty of them have an income of 0000...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, thus, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 331.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93957703927 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72999803261 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465256797583 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8266253299 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.1875 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6875 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231392481155 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840028486964 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0995390627541 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164382910408 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969992503051 0.0628817314937 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 332 350
No. of Characters: 1609 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.269 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.846 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.687 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.148 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5