Inorder to attract more tourists what should government do?
Ornament the city
hire more police officers
It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and progressive world where we live, tourism help to nourish counries econamic. In this regard, government can have higher income by attracting more tourists to provide better life for the people. Recently, there has been in a debate on which way is more beneficial to attract more tourism. While some people believe that ornamenting the cities is more helpful, other stand on the other side of the continuum believing that governemt must secure the cities with police officers in order to catch more tourists. As far as I concerned, I believe in the decorating the city is more beneficial. My reasons to substatiate my view point are elaborated hereunder.
First and without a shadow of doubt, tourism mostly want to visit palces with clear and attracting environment. There no need to say that, cities with polluted will distract the passengers. In other words, when the tourist come back to their country they will post photo and images from the city cite. Needless to say, if the envirnment looks dirty and inconvinent for the ones who see the pictures, the will loss their interest to visit that place. Gradually, getting aware of the polluted condition of the city, the country faces significant drop in number of visitors. To put in into more vivid picture, take India as an example. India is a country with too many visiting cites. It has temple made by a famous king, attracted too many visitors every year. However, Indian's people are too dirty they usually pee in street, the envirnment is mostly full of trash and everybody can easily smell tarsh when walking in its streets. As a resault, the number of tourists have been dropped recently. These number will decrease further, unless the government start a revolution to ornament the environment.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that, ornamented cities demonstrate not only physical beautifulness but also reflex good culture of the people living there. Psychologicaly speaking, the more fascniating an environment be, the better effect it will have on the viewer mind. Needless to say, people of a country mostly want to see as well-cultured when a foreigner faceing them. As a reasult, the government must recustruct the city area in a good way to demonstrates how well the culture of the people living there is. Take my county as an example. When tourist first come to Iran they think people have low behavior and culture, only because of the environment of the cities. The gorvernment have not ornament the cities well. There no night life style. The colors of building are same all in brown or gray. All these aspects effects the visitors and telling them these people don't have good moral.
To sum up contemplating all the aforementioned reasons one can draw the conllusion is that, government must deconrate cities to attract visitors. Not only will provide inreases the motivations of visitor to advertise to attrat more poeple but also help to show good culture of the people living there.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict 85
- Inorder to attract more tourists what should government do Ornament the city hire more police officers 70
- TPO 52 76
- There is no reason to be impolite rude to another person 87
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, well, while, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2540.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68759259307 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511811023622 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 797.4 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.5391274446 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5862068966 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5172413793 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.72413793103 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248941538418 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616286045481 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703921510643 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165274844391 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0977889252198 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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