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i absolutely agree with that statement,because i think technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.i hold this opinion becuase of several opinion.the first,by developing technology,many things ariund us is available and it does not require any effort and difficulty to gain those equipments,so it may cause children and even adults to be lazy and less creative.the second,it seems to me that spending so much time on using technology can be the another reason for being less creative,specifically among children.the third,our educational system also may have great impacts on laziness and less creativeness,because teachers in schools do not teach children that how to be creative,and how we can obviate our need ourselves.
i pesronally think that developing technology influence on children's less creativeness directly.in other words,when a child see that everything around him is ready and available,it is meaningless for him to invent something new and try to be creative,instead,it makes him indolent and lazy.besides,he is not adapted to difficult situations,while people in the past,because they faced to hard conditions,they used to obviate their needs themselves,therefore,they struggled more due to invent new technologies and research around many subjects in order to find something that may help them.
on the other hand,spending so much time on using technologies such as playing game,watching tv,using internet excessively may be the another reason for becoming less creative,specially among children.for instance,my cousin,who is 13 years old and lives in tehran city,usually spend his time on playng games on internet.even he has no time to do his school's assignment,let alone being creative and doing something novel.so,because such a this person are increasing day by day,i believe than it can affects other children directly.
also,educational systems in several countries are guilty,because they have significant impress on children.to iluustrate,teachers in schools,no matter which grade of school,are not taught to be creative in their routine life,because of that reason they can not teach children how they shoud be creative.this method is affected directly by tchnology developement,because teachers also prefer to use ready equipments and properties rather than suggesting new ideas or creating new things.
generally,as far as i am concernd,technology developement have very bad impacts on children.
- TPO 30 integrated writing task 40
- Do you agree or disagree with he following statement Some parents offer money to their school age children for each high grades they get in school Do you think this is a good idea 72
- TPO 46 integrated writing skill 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement For the successful development of a country it is more important for a government to spend more money on education of very young children than to spend money on universities Use specific reasons and ex 66
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, while, for instance, i think, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 22.412803532 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1373.03311258 153% => OK
No of words: 362.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79281767956 5.08290768461 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.01001558134 2.5805825403 155% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 145.348785872 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599447513812 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 419.366225166 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 3.25607064018 399% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 1.25165562914 799% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0662251656 38% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 72.0 21.2450331126 339% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 217.540249149 49.2860985944 441% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 419.4 110.228320801 380% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 72.4 21.698381199 334% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 26.6 7.06452816374 377% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 48.0 4.19205298013 1145% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 42.0 13.3589403974 314% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -18.53 53.8541721854 -34% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 5.55761589404 347% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 33.7 11.0289183223 306% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.49 12.2367328918 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.74 8.42419426049 139% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 63.6247240618 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 63.0 10.7273730684 587% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.8 10.498013245 293% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 63.0 11.2008830022 562% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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