A philosopher, whose name eludes me at the moment, once said, “Follow your education wherever you should go for it “. This shows an important role of education in everybody’s life. Although some people believe that parents today do not involve in their children’s education, others think that they care about their children’s education more than the parents in the past. As far as I am concerned, I agree that today’s parents feel that they should track their children’s education than parents in the past. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
First, children’s books and exercises are complicated than the past ones so the children require more help to do them. The teachers should finish the books as soon as possible thus they do not have adequate time to practice with children. For instance, my little sister back home every day with plenty of homework. She should eat her lunch and after that, she starts her duties till night so she can not play with her friends. It has a lot of pressure on her at that age besides, she tries to keep mom near herself in order to get some helps to do assignments.
Second, parents try to see their children’s success in all parts of their life like educations. Every parent expects children to get top marks in their course and encourage them in any way they know such as buying presents, giving money, going to trip and, giving them freedom. Parents continue their supports not only when their children are starting university, but also when they are finding a job. For example, my father tries to support me for a PhD. education after I was married four years ago. Since he was trying to encourage me when I started my first year of study.
To sum up, with all this taken into account, today’s parents involve themselves in children's education more that parents in the past. Children have plenty of homework besides, their books were complex. So, they need their parent’s help to do exercises. Parent’s wish is that children succeed in their schools, universities, and, jobs. Thus, parents do their best for children like involving in children’s education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87945205479 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61323909691 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564383561644 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9583052193 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8095238095 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.380952381 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404232882319 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124985988254 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111554479109 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267076119513 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130019174994 0.0645574589148 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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