Financial responsiblity is a crucial thing among human life. A controversial argument regarding this topic is whether to let children manage their money from young ages or not. If I were obliged to choose, I would think that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age for several reasons, on a few of which I will elaborate subsequently.
First, I think people learn things based on consiquences of their decisions, in this case, I believe people will be better financially responsible if they experience the consiquences of their decisions about how they want to spend their money at young ages. I believe that my opinion is partially influenced by my personal experience, when I was a little kid, my dad gave me some money to spend for the whole week, but I spent that money at once in first day, after that I had no money for the rest of the week and I had lots of struggles during that week, thus I learned a good lesson about managing my money.
Secondly, saving is very important in managing money, children should learn how to save money to achieve what they desire. I believe parents should teach their children to be patient about things they want to have, they have to practice to hold their selves from buying unnecessary stuff and save money to buy what they really wants. For instance, I remember my sister wanted a big doll when she was nine, my dad told her that she has to save her weekly monies to buy that doll for herself, as result, now she's great at saving and always has good amount of money in her bank account to buy her desired stuff.
I resist the temptation to explain more, hoping there is enough information already. To sum it up, as the reasons suggest, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age, because not only it makes them better managers, but it helps them to save better later.
- TOEFL T P O 4 Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO 30 Integrated Writing Task 40
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- TOEFL T P O 15 Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: she's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5505952381 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45793515454 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532738095238 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.3785442772 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.9 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226254636304 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106385638979 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741253065487 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164446980463 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575281172046 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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