On these days, there is an increasing trend of people consuming sugar-based drinks. The main reasons to the rise of this are, the huge ammount of chilhood oriented publicity and the peoples' unknwon about the health issues that these drinks make in their bodies. To avoid both causes it is neccesary to apply some regulations and teach the people about healthy habits.
On the one hand, there is a great quantity of puclibity orientated to the consume of these drinks. Moreover, these advertisements have a high impact in the youngest people. Let take Coca-Cola as an example, one of the pillars of their image is the narrow relation between christmanths and their brand This is a proof about how the publicity of Coca-cola is chilhood orientend. Therefore, a significant way to fight about companies with similiar strategies than Coca-cola, could be to make some regulations to avoid the influence of these brand in the childs.
On the other hand, it is important to teach the people about the problems that these kind of drinks could create in their bodies. Althougt, that habits are difficult to change, there are some succesfull cases where the information have helped the people to change them. As an example, the consume of cigarretes has decreased dramatically in some countries because the difusion of a lot of data about how this product affecs the health on a negative way.
To conclude, the rise in consuming of sugar-based drinks is in consequece of the advertisement and the lack of information. Therefore, making some regulations and giving information to the people, is possible to help them to avoid these drinks.
On these days, there is an increasing trend of people consuming sugar-based drinks. The main reasons to the rise of this are, the huge ammount of chilhood oriented publicity and the peoples' unknwon about the health issues that these drinks make in their bodies. To avoid both causes it is neccesary to apply some regulations and teach the people about healthy habits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e ammount of chilhood oriented publicity and the peoples unknwon about the health...
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...eat quantity of puclibity orientated to the consume of these drinks. Moreover, these advert...
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Suggestion:
...eir image is the narrow relation between christmanths and their brand This is a p...
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...each the people about the problems that these kind of drinks could create in their bodies....
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...e people to change them. As an example, the consume of cigarretes has decreased dramaticall...
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Suggestion:
...retes has decreased dramatically in some countries because the difusion of a lot ...
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Suggestion:
...e ammount of chilhood oriented publicity and the peoples unknwon about the health...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02994011976 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72804277123 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.398203592814 0.561755894193 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3927529889 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189310578524 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830343445984 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064255379754 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140156755247 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735246360499 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.