In the context of today's competitive global economy, the main purpose of a country's education system is to prepare young people for particular types of work rather than to help them develop into independent-thinking individuals.
Nowadays, the impact of globalization on educational systems is the main concern that provided a key role for young students. Some people support that schools should be based on the educational system of designated works, yet some people doubt it. In my opinion, I disagree with this statement because helps young people to evolve independent thinking that it is a vital method.
First of all, independent thinking skills are the leaders of learning not only to be a great thinker but also to be a great leader. The young people can learn how to think critically and to identify fact from the truth, and it is countless ways for educators to help students evolve independent thinking skills to prepare future works. For example, they will understand what jobs are suitable for them after thinking if they know their merits and shortcomings. On the other hand, if teachers only teach them specific work content without developing independent thinking, they may become a follower who pursues someone’s step.
Moreover, young people will automatically become active learners and learn about the world based on personal experience. Also, self-determining thinking skills can assist them with abilities to learn from mistakes and gain their confidence, and observe what’s need of this country and make critical decisions to build a successful life. For example, a number of well-known business people who learned from many mistakes by their self-determining thinking, and then made a lot of events to be successful.
In conclusion, although there are many different points of view on this statement, the purpose of education should support children in developing independent thinking and build knowledge that will allow them to be a good person and to succeed.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 35, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27304964539 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89289771688 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574468085106 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.0218361182 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.181818182 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6363636364 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5454545455 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283285093503 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108385512886 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566033283421 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170036923261 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641648677005 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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