The debate over the impact of educational background on development of a country has been going on forever. From my perspective, I strongly believe that both school and university educational period are strictly essential and effective on student's future performance in their field of interest and both demand same attention and precision methods and fund to achieve proper results. I feel this way because of two reasons which I will explain in following essay.
To begin with, courses which are thought in school lays the base foundation of what students should learn in university. If the base of a course is unclear to a student, their performance both in class and exams will drop significantly. Additionally, universities tend to prepare students to become experts in a specific field and pay much less attention to other field. For instance, manner and ethics should be thought and practiced starting from a young age and it is hard to change someone's behavior after 18. Therefore, people need to improve other social and useful skills which are essential in their future during their school period. The reason I feel this way is because in my country, the school puts so much effort so students excel in math and science and dedicate less amount of time for ethical and social lessons. This has resulted in bringing up a society with high SATs and slow improvement in business and technology.
As well as that, any country needs experts in all fields that have a profoundly impact on its development. Universities acquire students to study and put long hours in preparing themselves with sufficient information on a specific area of education. Because with vast diversity in fields nowadays, it is impossible for each person to study all of them. So, having university education after school years is a must.
To conclude, based on following reasons I mentioned above, I believe that government should spend same amount of money for both school and university education because this money will come back when students use their education to expand businesses held in the country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 672, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...hool period. The reason I feel this way is because in my country, the school puts so much ...
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Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('profoundly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('impact') instead of another adjective.
...y needs experts in all fields that have a profoundly impact on its development. Universities acquir...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, as well as, to begin with, as well as that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07826086957 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77167234929 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547826086957 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2655043006 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.8 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0675517063424 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0243001976024 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0236164695247 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0458059333597 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0086751156264 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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