Some people think that hard work and determination bring success. Others thinks other factors such as money and appearance are more important. Discuss both view and give your opinion?
It is true that there are many elements that lead to success in life. While it can be argued that some different factors such as money and appearance are more vital, I believe that hard work and determination are key factors that bring success.
On the one hand, there are those who believe that money and personal appearance play essential roles in the success of people. People are increasingly judged by their wealth or their good look. Firstly, the wealthy will have the opportunity to study at a prestigious school and gain a decent degree. This gives them a head start in life, so they may notch up success effortlessly. In addition, without money, it is difficult for people to pursue their dreams and achieve success in the future. Secondly, people can have a competitive edge with a good face and fashionable clothes. For example, Ngoc Trinh, a renowned model in Vietnam, has become a household name partly because of her classical beauty.
On the other hand, I side with those who argue that success and determination are vital to the success of people. It is obvious that success does not come overnight, it is a long and arduous process. Individuals must have worked hard day in day out and faced with much adversity before achieving success. Furthermore, they have to courage to resist temptation and refuse to indulge themselves in pleasure. Take Thomas Edison, is an eminent scientist, for example. To create successfully the light bulb, he carried out numerous experiments. Although he failed many times, he did not give up. As a result, his efforts ended in success and it really reflected his determination. This explains the casual relationship between hard work and success.
In conclusion, despite the undeniable argument of the role of money and appearance in success, I firmly believe that hard work and determination are key factors for success in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95253164557 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76254585298 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572784810127 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4873014488 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3684210526 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6315789474 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.10526315789 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266199803737 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723295224473 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832809413046 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192206299939 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763233151837 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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