Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without any doubt, owing to the high expenses that each family have, parents are busy with their jobs to make money for their families' welfare. Some people hold a positive perspective toward that fact that parents spend thire bare time on playing games with their kids. Whereas, others think that they should focus on the school performances of their child. As far as I'm concerned, parents must be coucsious and aware about their children's schoolworks.
To begin with, normally, children spend enough time with their friends either in the schools or in their neighborhoods to play games and have fun. Therfore, it is imperative for their parents to take care of their kids' learning process, which is as much important as the liesure activities. My personal experience is a compelling example of what I mean. When I went to elementary school, I played all the time with my best friends during our rest time between the classes. In that case, I did not feel any extra need for palying with my parents at home. Also, I was required to achieve good grades in my exams. Hence, my mother spent her free time to work with me on my assignment which was difficult for me to deal with them alone. This example demonstrates how it is necessary for children to have thier parents attention toward their school performances.
Furtheremore, childhood is a golden time for each person to build his/her future. In fact, by squandering this cherished period in unnecessary duties, the children's future might be endangered. Although kids need to have fun and play various games, their education should not pale, and parents play a crucial role in this regard. They should focus on their children's assignments and exams to encourage them becamming a successful person in their future. For instance, if my mother did not emphasize on my performance in the schoolworks, I would not become able to pursue my dreams and become a doctor. I appeciate my mother's attention and help for avoding me waste my time and energy in my childhood.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that parents should spend their free time on the practices related to their kids' schools, rather than palying games with them. Actually, children spend enough time having fun with their friend at school, and their assignments and exams should be controled by their parents. In addition, their precious time in their childhood must be used very effective as well, due to its importance for their future.
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... time on playing games with their kids. Whereas, others think that they should focus on...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... performances of their child. As far as Im concerned, parents must be coucsious an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, hence, if, so, well, whereas, for instance, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93253012048 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61659897888 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520481927711 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.807437941 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.4761904762 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331103444931 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106953411213 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891149751051 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22647050343 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677086422754 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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