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With the beginning of a globalization era, the world’s pop-culture is diluted with a variety of genres in the music. It is quoted that music is like magic, thus this essay will cite the reasons of the importance of this magic in our lives, as well as explain if cultural music has a power over the worldwide music.

Music has always been the integral part of the humanity. It is a concept which takes a root in the mid-ages, when it was used to be a placebo of welfare to mentally ill people as well as promoting endorphins in order to gratify one who goes through tough moments. It has the ability to assure one in a happy and successful life and provides support to depressed citizens through words and melody. For example, a 35-year-old patient in one of the local hospitals was diagnosed with depression after his failures in his personal life, along with troubles at the workplace. He was placed on a therapeutic course, precisely the music-course to refresh his mindset. Accordingly, to the head doctor, in a couple of months the patient successfully finished course and adjusted his attitude towards life. Therefore, just one listen to music can improve and heal one’s life with no side effects.

The importance of the traditional music is not comparable with an influence of the international music which is played on every platform and radio station. In the dynamic world, where terminologies such as stress or anxiety became everyday life words, it is necessary to entertain citizens with addictive sounds or danceable music which sustains the nation with dopamine. In contrast, traditional music has the vitalness by only containing a cultural code of its nation, the mainstream music promotes those above mentioned hormones. For example, Billie Eilish an 19-year-old singer became a colossal artist just in one year, by just one major reason, her creation was played everywhere. Those crazy, exotic beats along with a voice full of tranquility made many citizens addicted to her energetic music. Many people have confessed that her music in 2020, a year that from the start was an upheaval, saved them a bit of happiness in their life. 

In conclusion, music is an intangible concept that serves to be a medicine for an abundant amount of people, and mainstream music is more important in current days when traditional music is important for the culture of the nation.

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 402.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95771144279 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77735510757 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55223880597 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.4103737197 49.4020404114 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.866666667 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.021446190364 0.244688304435 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00649862650925 0.084324248473 8% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0131755844215 0.0667982634062 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0153340134539 0.151304729494 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00374156786437 0.056905535591 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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