The author clearly concludes that schools should reduce the funding for public schools, in other hand the saved money can be used for audult purposes, but we can clearly say that the author clarification or point of view was flawed. Author does not mention clear statistics and proofs that the birthrate is decreased and moreover we can not certify that the birthrate will be same as this year for the next coming years, so author should mention more explanation or more information to decide or conclude to reduce the funding for child athletics and functionalities.
Author decided that the birthrate decreased based on one statistics he had and he decided by considering last five years reports, this may leads to take wrong decision in future, because the future can not be as same as now the birthrate can be increased or decreased in the case of increase in birthrate the author's view is flawed. the author need to mention or study for last 15-20 years, this information may help the author to decide or to take the right decision.
In authors point of view the saved money can be used to for the audult things, in this case the author did not mention the authors persentage or their contriibution in the society, consider the case after 5 years the audults go to their proffessions and the equipments or the money spent on the audult will be wasted. By this we can say the author's point is flawed.
The argument could be strenghthened if the author provided information regarding the last 15 years or birthrate and if he mentioned the audults contribution and clear information about the funding.
- Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless they in fact prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals 50
- Some people believe that the most important qualities of an effective teacher are understanding and empathy Others believe that it is more important for teachers to be rigorous and demanding in their expectations for students 50
- The birthrate in our city is declining in fact last year s birthrate was only one half that of five years ago Thus the number of students enrolled in our public schools will soon decrease dramatically and we can safely reduce the funds budgeted for educat 55
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 277 350
No. of Characters: 1311 1500
No. of Different Words: 119 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.08 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.733 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.641 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 46.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.298 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.555 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.823 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.338 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
..., this may leads to take wrong decision in future, because the future can not be as same ...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...n birthrate the authors view is flawed. the author need to mention or study for las...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 55.5748502994 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1336.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 277.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82310469314 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68944103744 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 204.123752495 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429602888087 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 399.6 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.8473053892 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.671339248 57.8364921388 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 190.857142857 119.503703932 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.5714285714 23.324526521 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201625483504 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112291340977 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596964818505 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135671384292 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583557373561 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.1 14.3799401198 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 48.3550499002 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.1 12.197005988 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 98.500998004 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.1389221557 158% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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