A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer; several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe; and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every week night at 7 P.M. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. We therefore predict that the C Note cannot help but make money.
The present argument suffers from clear logical flaws and errors which considered together fails to render sufficient factual evidence to be agreeable. I will distinguish the holes below.
First and foremost, the author justifies the argument by noting that as the closest jazz club is located 65 miles away which results in ascribing all local market benefits to C-Note club. However, the writer has not offered clear evidence on the point that if local residents are willing to travel such distance to attend other club that they are going for so many years or prefer to use C-Note. In fact, the author made a crystal clear error to correlate these two factors.
Second, the author goes forward to claim that jazz music is relatively popular in Monroe and brings some evidence to justify his/her assertion. Undoubtedly, the author of the statement goes wrong to attribute characteristics of a group to every resident of Monroe. We barely know about the musical taste of all people living in the city. The writer makes a tragical error when cites the attendees of the Monroe’s annual jazz festival as an evidence of popularity of jazz in neigbourhood simply because these people are traveling Monroe to attend the festival and are not Monroe residents.
Third, the author acclaims that a nationwide study presents that jazz musical’s every single fan is spending about $1000 every year on jazz related entertainments. Thus, the writer arrives at the conclusion that C-Note club will be nothing but profitable. The author makes a significant error when he ascribes the characteristics of a single group (the people who participated in the survey) to the all members of the nation including Monroe residents. Besides, we just do not know that the participants in mentioned survey are disseminated evenly in all cities. To be clear it is possible that just a confined group of the Monroe’s people has participated in that study.
In order to have the argument fully evaluated, the author needs to put some other information and evidence in his or her assertion including if the attendees in the last year’s festival were Monroe’s residents or not. Other information we need to know is that how many people in Monroe listen to the radio programs that are related to the jazz music.
In conclusion, in spite of the fact that the present argument is rife with obvious flaws and fallacies which make it unconvincing, we cannot absolutely decline the outcome without demanding extra information and data. Therefore, the writer is able to put some additional info to make his or her assertion plausible.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 433 350
No. of Characters: 2125 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.562 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.908 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.66 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.484 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.434 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, thus, in conclusion, in fact, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2181.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04861111111 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76592281233 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3007581002 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.166666667 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271653865954 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080295613861 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888059593006 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127625729073 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0930619176679 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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