The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

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The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010.

The pie charts compare the proportion of the working population in manufacturing, sales and services in 1960 and 2010 in two towns.

Overall, the percentage of the workforce in manufacturing increased in both towns in 2010 compared with the 1960 figures. By contrast, in Towns A and B, the proportion of those working in the sales sector fell in 2010.

In 1960, the figure for workers in manufacturing was 29% in Town A, almost three times higher than the figure in Town B. However, by 2010 the proportion of people in manufacturing had risen in Towns A and B to 64% and 25%, respectively.

On the other hand, the figures for the sales sector witnessed a decline. In Town A, the proportion of the workforce in sales in 1960 was 41% and this fell by over half to 20% in 2010. In Town B, the figure decreased from 70% in 1960 to 53% in 2010.

The percentage of workers in the services sector almost halved in Town A to 16% in 2010, whereas in Town B it rose slightly from 20% in 1960 to 22% in 2010.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 34, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'services'' or 'service's'?
Suggestion: services'; service's
...10. The percentage of workers in the services sector almost halved in Town A to 16% i...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 823.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40106951872 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69718116545 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433155080214 0.547539520022 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 228.6 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.9901673912 43.030603864 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4444444444 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.23603664747 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394146196058 0.215688989381 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179792001655 0.103423049105 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068961157828 0.0843802449381 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242822082917 0.15604864568 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504638243222 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 85.02 61.2550243902 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 34, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'services'' or 'service's'?
Suggestion: services'; service's
...10. The percentage of workers in the services sector almost halved in Town A to 16% i...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 823.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40106951872 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69718116545 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433155080214 0.547539520022 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 228.6 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.9901673912 43.030603864 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4444444444 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.23603664747 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394146196058 0.215688989381 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179792001655 0.103423049105 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068961157828 0.0843802449381 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242822082917 0.15604864568 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504638243222 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 85.02 61.2550243902 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.