task 2 The government should spend more money on medical research to protect citizens health rather than on protecting the environment Do you agree or disagree

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task 2: The government should spend more money on medical research to protect citizens’ health rather than on protecting the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

n recent years, medicine has becoming in a matter of discussion. The state should invest more money on study medicine to secure people’s health compared with solving the natural environment. In this essay, I strongly disagree with this sentence.
There are several reasons why I agree that the government should spend more money to protect the environment. Firstly, natural environment has a variety of herbs or medical plants which are very useful for study medicine to cure people. For example, Gynostemma pentaphyllum is a rare plant that found in Sapa. It can treat to reduce the amount of fat blood in our bodies and help people sleep easily. Therefore, the local state should invest a lot of money to solving environment because it is not only protect valuable plants but it also help medical research more successful such as invent new drugs. Secondly, more and more water resources polluted due to throwing wastes and exploiting oil in ocean. For instance, people live in the south of Vietnam and they usually use water from lakes or ponds near their houses. However, companies or factories discharge contaminated water which can affect people’s health when they drink it. Moreover, if the government tackle water pollution, it will enhance the quality of our health.
There are numerous reasons why I feel that the state should not pay a lot of money for study medicine. First of all, many other fields are able to be important rather than medical research. To illustrate, if we do not spend more money in education, it can lead to students to learning old subjects and can not explore new things in study. Furthermore, new drugs bring harmful side-effects for people who use it. This is because ingredient drugs contain chemicals as aspirin and naproxen. Those two groups make people feel vomit when they drink it.
In conclusion, the government should spend a lot of money for medical research rather than protecting environment. In my opinion, the state of each countries should contribute more money in the environment such as using bicycle make fresh air and use basket to contain food or vegetables instead of using nylon. If people conduct the plan of protecting the natural habitat, it will enhance the quality of life.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: N
n recent years, medicine has becoming in ...
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Line 2, column 539, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...nly protect valuable plants but it also help medical research more successful such a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61725237776 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3139554689 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0476190476 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329181348606 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914491782339 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117915338732 0.0667982634062 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19715237138 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810570039778 0.056905535591 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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