Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that spending time with family is one of the most valuable boon that everybody wants to have. There has been a controversial debate among parent not having much time to spend with their children as to whether they should make the most of their available time to have fun playing with kids. From my perspective, it is so beneficial to play with children than to do things that are related to education and school works, and two reasons to support my view are presented as follows.
To begin with, playing with kids is the best use of time since helps them to enjoy mental and physical health. It is not a secret to anyone that people being old or young needs enough energy and motives to do their responsibilities as well as possible; if they spend all their time working or doing the same tasks, they will definitely be overwhelmed with anxiety which is the main cause of depression and children are not an exception; they have more sensitive personalities and parents should try to keep children's interests in continuing their education. Working on assignments and school works all the time, young students will lose their passions to read different materials since they supposed to spend a little time with their parents and having fun not to complete home works. To put it in more vivid picture, my younger sister, who was 8 by the time, had no especial opportunity to spend her time with the family since all of us were so busy, and my mother was just helping her to finish her homework. My sister, who had an outgoing personality, no longer was talking or communicating with other people and obviously she had a hard time coping with depression. Had we devote time to play with her, she would not have been caught in the clutches of depression.
Furthermore, playing and having fun, young students will be more successful individuals in their future. It is crystal clear that experiencing different activities will open people's minds because they are able to discover so many novel things through those activities. According to an article conducted in my country children playing games with their families are more likely to be more intelligent since collaboration with other especially siblings and parents motives their minds and they will be more creative. Therefore, children who have a chance to play with their families are more likely to be successful in the course of study and become qualified individuals. As you can see, playing will have profound positive impacts on the children's developments.
In sum, not only will children be more successful individuals in their future, they will also enjoy better mental health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... much time to spend with their children as to whether they should make the most of their avai...
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Line 3, column 1178, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'devoted'.
Suggestion: devoted
...ard time coping with depression. Had we devote time to play with her, she would not ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, as to, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2219.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9092920354 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67147002508 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495575221239 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.9996168574 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.933333333 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1333333333 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36296281628 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140983261366 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735550690112 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215814757328 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125300397978 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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