In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary to have both parents go to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel that they lack support because of parent’s absense.
Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Nowadays, our world is changing at a seemingly perpetual pace. Prices are practically on everything we consume are getting higher. This requires both husband and wife to get a full-time job to relieve the financial burden on the whole family. As the result, the increase of family income offers a lot of advantages to their children, whereas for some families, the children may suffer by being neglected unintentionally.
There is no doubt that a well-off family can give their children a wide range of benefits. A wealthy family can be defined as family with decent and steady monthly income which usually demands both parent’s working effort. For example, children can be educated at the finest educational institutions if their family has a strong financial background. Moreover, there are a number of music, art classes where their talents can be both revealed and nurtured. Furthermore, such kids are able to broaden their horizon of the outside world by taking costly overseas trips which help them explore the diversity of the unknown cultures in different countries. In addition, they can access better health care for their further physical and mental development.
However, the fact that both parents get a job can often result in their offspring being neglected. Firstly, if parents are spending too much time on their career, they will have less time to give to their children. As consequences, a feeling of neglect or isolation may likely occur in the children. Moreover, young people will be affected by their bad classmates, or they may adopt bad practices and faulty conducts from virtual friends from places such as Facebook and Instagram. It is hard for children to resist all those temptations surrounding them if there is a lack of support, guidance, and observation from their mother and father.
In conclusion, I totally agree with the idea that parents with additional income can provide their children a lot of betterments. Obviously, it will provide substantial benefits to those in childhood. However, there is also a need for parents to spend more time with their children, supervising, guiding, sharing, in order to secure a well-balanced child in a dual working household.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 372, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[5]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun music seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much music', 'a good deal of music'.
Suggestion: much music; a good deal of music
...nancial background. Moreover, there are a number of music, art classes where their talents can be...
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Line 5, column 497, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s Facebook and Instagram. It is hard for children to resist all those temptations...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, whereas, as for, for example, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18715083799 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83195731082 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572625698324 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1460812229 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.166666667 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220293344151 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698493761855 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496129510405 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135208056006 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182325038826 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 372, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[5]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun music seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much music', 'a good deal of music'.
Suggestion: much music; a good deal of music
...nancial background. Moreover, there are a number of music, art classes where their talents can be...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 497, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s Facebook and Instagram. It is hard for children to resist all those temptations...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, whereas, as for, for example, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18715083799 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83195731082 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572625698324 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1460812229 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.166666667 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220293344151 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698493761855 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496129510405 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135208056006 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182325038826 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.