In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary to have both parents go to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel that they lack support because of parent’s absense.
Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Nowadays, the world in which we live is changing every second. Prices are underway to reach the climax due to the inflation. It requires both husband and wife to get a full-time job to ease financial burden of the whole family. As the result, the increased income goes hand in hand with the opening for a great deal of opportunities for children, whereas there is a possibility of children having neglected unintentionally .
There is no doubt that a well-off family is capable of giving their offspring a lot of benefits. A rich family can be defined as a family with decent and steady income which usually demands both parent’s working efforts. For instance, children can have a better access to the finest educational institutions if their families have strong financial backgrounds. Moreover, such kids will possibly be able to explore their inner aptitudes through the way of experiencing classes such as art, dancing, and music. Furthermore, given the financial support from parents children are able to take overseas trips which help them to discover the variety of different cultures in different places. Regarding to children’s mental and physical advantage, they are entitled into many private hospitals to have a monthly checkup for their overall health.
Nevertheless, it is believed that both parents having to work often results in the lack of care for their children. To begin with, father and mother will have less time to spend with their kids if they are prioritizing most of their time on career. As the consequences, the sense of togetherness and parental bonds are more likely to fade away. Furthermore, the absence of parents propels children to spend more time interacting with their classmates both in schools and on social media, whereby children may adopt bad practices and conducts from their fellows. It is hard for such kids to get away from temptations surroundings them given their young age, and most of that causes attribute to the lack of supervising, sharing, guiding from their parents.
In conclusion, I totally contend with the idea that family with a sufficient income can better facilitate their children in many aspects of their lives. However, it is a need for parents to spend time staying with children, both educating, sharing and observing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 423, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...hildren having neglected unintentionally . There is no doubt that a well-off fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, well, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1924.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13066666667 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.799732413 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6470588235 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.176470588 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35294117647 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235452534905 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832981228557 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063490060374 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150410713043 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447143350788 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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