Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world. Do you agree or disagree
Currently, people start to care for education because they think that education is the only weapon, even the most powerful one, which can be used to change the whole world. I totally concur with this opinion because of these rational reasons.
Firstly, education helps raise people’s awareness as well as change their behavior. Education builds consciousness of laws and the consequences if you violate those laws. If there is no education, people cannot distinguish what they should do or should not do; as a result, they might deliberately commit offences. Therefore, education foretells citizens all the risks which they probably confront once they engage in criminal activities. For example, there is a law in Vietnam that students under eighteen years old are not allowed to ride motorbikes. Woefully, my brother-17 years old- had no clue about this law so he decided to ride a motorbike when he hung out with his friends. Consequently, he was fined by the police officer.
Secondly, education creates more employment opportunities. When people apply for a job, they have to compete with hundreds of other candidates for a vacant position. The lower the education level, the greater the number of people applying for the same low paid jobs. Nevertheless, the rate of obtaining a fulfilling job increases if people have the right qualifications or educational background. Hence, they will have chances to upgrade their life. For instance, my sister had the advantage of offering an internship for a famous company, beating thousands of applications thanks to her fly colors.
In conclusion, people recognize the importance of education in this day and age because it brings back more employment opportunities; furthermore, it widens people’s knowledge of social information.
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- In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure successful future 78
- Some believe that politicians are the most influential people in the world while others believe scientists are the most influential Which side do you agree with and why Provide specific reasoning for your answer 76
- Museums and art galleries should concentrate on works that show history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts in the world Do you agree or disagree 76
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 282.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3475177305 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00386217534 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.656028368794 0.524837075471 125% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1602226631 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.25 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 5.45110844103 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182155618098 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533476954741 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842728164106 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112826304938 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0978091922259 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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