Some individuals claim that authoritative powers should allocate budget for artists, while others contend that they should find finances from other ways. This essay agrees that government should take the responsibility of providing necessary funds to people in the entertainment industry because of their enormous contribution to the economy, or else they will demotivate leading to an economic downturn.
Government should promote the development of the arts industry as it helps in boosting the country’s economy by employing a huge number of people and making the country an attractive destination for tourists. Were authorities do not fund such a valuable sector, a lot of people will become unemployed and the tourism industry will also collapse. Therefore, it is crucial to budget finances for people in the creative arts sector. This is supported by a recent study conducted at Oxford University, in which they claimed that if the money allocates for this industry is increased by 10%, there will be a 25% rise in its contribution to the GDP.
However, some do not believe in investing in arts, instead, they need arts employees to find alternative ways of funding, such as private sponsors. If this is the case, not only do creative people demotivate, but the country will also face a huge economic crisis due to the downturns of the tourism and entertainment industries. For instance, according to the annual newsletter of the National Tourism Ministry, 95% of foreigners visit the country due to the unique local creative arts.
In conclusion, while some say that artists should be paid by the government, others say that they should support themselves by alternative means of funds. This essay agrees that the allocation of government money for artists is a must to develop the economy and to prevent people from being unemployed.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
...t should promote the development of the arts industry as it helps in boosting the co...
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Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
...get finances for people in the creative arts sector. This is supported by a recent s...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...on of government money for artists is a must to develop the economy and to prevent peop...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21812080537 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90773893656 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523489932886 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.9593311427 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.363636364 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0909090909 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274142582494 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108323962061 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687956418885 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182233424134 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068568123761 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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