In this argument, the author predicts that instituting online degree programs will help Humana University increase enrollment and solve its budget problems based on increase in enrollment at the nearby Omni University. The argument seems convincing at first, but there are some logical loopholes that help weaken the argument.
Firstly, the author mistakenly assumes that both the regions, where these Universities are located, are somehow similar. This assumption asserts that having an online degree program will help increase enrollment at Humana University. Maybe the real reason for increase in enrollment at Omni university might be, that the people there would have been able to afford a degree program as oppose to the region where Humana University is located. A comparative study showing similarities between the people of both regions would have helped eliminate this loophole.
The next unwarranted assumption that the author makes is that the decrease in enrollment at the Humana University is solely because of the absence of an online degree program. There can be many reasons for the decrease in enrollment such as the quality of education might not be that promising. Maybe the people graduated from Humana University have failed to get a professional employment resulting in a lack of trust among the people in the region. A brief discussion about the quality of education at Humana University would have helped strengthen the argument.
Lastly the author vaguely claims that having an online degree program will help solve its budget problems. The problem of concern here is that, the author fails to account for the initial cost that will be incurred in creating as well as promoting an online degree program. Maybe the amount of investment involved would further strain the already existing budget problems. Besides that, there is no guarantee that having such an online degree program will instantly cause the number of enrollments to increase.
In conclusion, the author provides some arguments to support his prediction but fails to provide credible proof which support those arguments and in turn leaves room for doubts that weaken the argument.
- Claim In any situation the best way to persuade other people is to present them with facts and statistics rather than with emotional arguments Reason Facts are objective so they are more persuasive than subjective appeals 50
- Over 80 percent of the respondents to a recent survey indicated a desire to reduce their intake of foods containing fats and cholesterol and today low fat products abound in many food stores Since many of the food products currently marketed by Old Dairy 55
- 45 The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent During the same year Omni showed a signif 73
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 343 350
No. of Characters: 1800 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.304 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.248 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.566 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.023 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.615 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: AS_OPPOSE_TO_AS_OPPOSED_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as opposed to'?
Suggestion: as opposed to
...ve been able to afford a degree program as oppose to the region where Humana University is l...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, lastly, may, so, then, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 343.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37609329446 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63103340561 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475218658892 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3799723492 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.933333333 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225714039647 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890034689631 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790912065117 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131224002042 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07191520825 0.0628817314937 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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