Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in traveling to work is to replace park and garden close to the city centre with apartment buildings where computer can live to what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is an undeniable fact that, in recent time, travelling time to work is increasing. Therefore, it is believed by some that, to replace the parks and gardens with the residential building is the only way to reduce it. However, I certainly disagree with such an opinion to a large extent, and the reasons for my stand will be analyzed further.
There are several factors behind increasing travelling time to work, beside of long-distance. Firstly, traffic congestion on the road. What I mean to say by this is that, as the economy of the nation increase, the purchasing power of the people may also rise, therefore in millennium days, the majority of people have the personal vehicles. As a result, the volume of vehicle on the road is increased, and the flow of traffic may decline. That is why, people may have to spend more time on travelling. Due to this, in India, 50% of Indians are spent more time on travelling than ever before.
Furthermore, it would be created many other hurdles. By this I mean, if the parks and gardens are demolished to make a new way for apartment, it could make city as concrete jungle, and may lead to the increase in the temperature of that area than nearby areas. Secondly, it would be leaded to many health problems. In other words, if there are no gardens, parks or trees than the level of air pollution would increase. Because, it is proven that greenery help to reduce the proportion of air pollution, which is the main cause of fatal disease like skin cancer.
On the contrary, such a decision might be helpful to reduce travelling time at certain level. In simple terms, if residential area are built near the city center, than people might encourage themselves to go to work by walking, it would decline the use of private vehicle, thus conjunction on the road also fall. It is noticed that, the volume of vehicle on the road is lesser than the time for travelling would reduce. For example, in the USA, after introducing apartment in the city center, the number of vehicles on the road drop by around 12%, and flow of traffic also increased.
In conclusion, I reiterate that build residential area in the place of gardens and parks is not a effective way to reduce travelling time, as there are other many factors are involved, such as traffic on the road, and if gardens are demolished, it would lead to increase in temperature and air pollution, however it might be reduced the problem to some extent, as the people may prefer walking to go office, thus the congestion on road will be declined.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 97, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n the place of gardens and parks is not a effective way to reduce travelling time...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, i mean, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 449.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68374164811 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62606469695 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458797327394 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.10420841683 428% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.2944158211 49.4020404114 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.684210526 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6315789474 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52631578947 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241247623581 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707950556565 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632620087219 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145405198408 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656558699544 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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