Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The following appeared in a memo from a Vice President of a large, highly diversified company.
"Ten years ago, our company had two new office buildings constructed as regional headquarters for two regions. The buildings were erected by different companies - Alpha and Zeta. Although the two buildings had identical floor plans, the building constructed by Zeta cost 30 percent more to build. However, that building's expenses for maintenance last year were only half those of Alpha's. In addition, the energy consumption of the Zeta building has been lower than that of the Alpha building every year since its construction. Given these data, plus the fact that Zeta has a stable workforce with little employee turnover, we recommend using Zeta rather than Alpha for our new building project, even though Alpha's bid promises lower construction costs.
The Vice President came to a conclusion that the company should prefer Zeta rather than Alpha, despite Alpha promising lesser construction costs. This conclusion seems to be drawn hastily in my opinion. Mr. Vice President has based his decision on data that leaves a lot of questions unanswered.
Firstly, one may enquire of the climate of the two regions in which the two buildings are located, since that plays a significant role in the energy consumption. What if the Alpha building is situated in a region that has soaring temperatures? Naturally, the building would drink more energy in air conditioning and cooling compared to
Zeta, especially if Zeta has a more mellow climate. Thus, climate of the two regions need to be taken into account before we decide anything.
Also, one might ask about the employee count and the infrastructure in the two buildings. Are they identical or similar in both? What if Alpha building has more people working in it because the region it is situated in is more populous requiring greater workforce? That would mean, more computers, more occupied office rooms, more electricity consumptions and hence greater energy consumption.
Is the equipment in both buildings identical? Some elevators consume more than others. Some computer types
are less efficient than others. This would also lead to energy consumption disparity. The difference in the technology such as elevators, fans, electricity wiring and not necessary building construction material can lead to higher maintenance costs in the Alpha building. Does one can ask for a distribution of the maintenance costs in both buildings to know precisely what is being repaired more frequently. Also, do the maintenance expense depend on the region? A part or equipment might be costing more in the Alpha building region than in the Zeta building region, naturally inflating the maintenance expense in the former.
Thus, a lot of questions need to be answered by Mr. Vice President before his decision can sound convincing. Choosing the right company for building construction is a tough decision involving a lot of parameters raising a myriad different questions.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 346 350
No. of Characters: 1771 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.313 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.118 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.832 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.476 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.169 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...air conditioning and cooling compared to Zeta, especially if Zeta has a more mell...
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Line 8, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me more than others. Some computer types are less efficient than others. This wou...
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Line 11, column 240, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'question'?
Suggestion: question
...f parameters raising a myriad different questions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, thus, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 346.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28612716763 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92085592108 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514450867052 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.5015885198 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0952380952 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4761904762 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116199367518 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352984521781 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428191999415 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0576123848362 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320608204943 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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