Unfortunately, aging is the thing, which waits for us in the end. It is critically important that we think about our future and how world changes with time. Many people think that in the modern world getting old is bad thing, but others do not agree with statement. Personally, I believe that people get old in the new world than in the back in the old past. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with I consider that it is better for old people to live in our time. Progressive world with new develops and modern medicine is better place for aging. Currently old people can travel around the world, they have access to modern medicine and almost any the sickness can be cured. Developing a new things and appearing technologies make our life ease. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. I have a grandfather and he lives so far away from us. He is a pensioner and he very active person. My grandfather has a mobile phone and he always tells how his day went. He has been in the Moscow in the last summer. Due to modern medicine and apparatus, he was a successful operation on the heart. Grandfather receive a good money because he is old person and he can buy all he want to need. I think this example describe my opinion well.
Furthermore, as we all know, getting old in the past gave not so much opportunities for old people. Currently, there are diverse foundation supporting pensioners. Also now there are various interest clubs, where older people can discuss something, create new things or spend their time. In addition, thanks to new technologies and the modern world, you can support connection with your relatives and friends, even if they are far away from you. Next, some companies to care and support old people. Many corporations emerge some benefits, sales and create funds. Therefore, the life of elderly people is much better now than in the past. For instance, I know one family where old people live very happily and enjoy life. On the weekend they are constantly travel somewhere. It is maybe can be picnic , walks, attractions park or visited their relatives. When once I came across them, I asked about the past and the modern world. They told me that live in the modern world is the best thing. Back then I consented with their opinion.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that the modern world is better place for all of us. This is because the world never stops and is constantly evolving , making our lives better and easier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2077.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63616071429 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54479764652 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504464285714 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9216819236 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.90625 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350812087974 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841770207913 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887780108047 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22070362237 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659133415507 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.04 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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