Some people think that children should do organized activities in their free time while others believe that they should be free to do what they want. Discuss both view and give your own opinions.
With the advanced optimization of the modern world where every educational system is placing great emphasis on adolescent's well-rounded development, the idea of letting them involved in prepared kinds of activities during leisure time has sparked a controversy. While this is beneficial to a certain extent, i strongly believe that they should be given freedom to pursue what they want.
Several reasons can be ascribed to the importance of activities that are given preparation by teachers or parents. In the first place, such kinds of recreations enable children to relax after a hard-working time studying and became phyically or mentally active with high level of safety and guaranteed outcomes. People would not have to fear the likelihood of the teenage students being injured or doing things aimlessly during their free time thanks to these organized activities such as football. As a result, following what adults instruct them to do could better ensure their holistic development. Furthermore, by participating in entertaining organizations prepared by knowledgeable and experienced mentors, children would have ample chances to develop healthy habits during pastime. For example, those knowing scientific basis behind such leisure activities and practicing according to the instructions of older people are less likely to partake in various morbid ones such as playing video games.
Notwithstanding all that, i am convinced that being allowed to self-organise would breed greater benefits. From an objective perspective, only children themselves could thoroughly understand their favourite fields, hence, by giving them a wide range of options to participate, they would be able to enjoy what their choice of activity has to offer. This could possibly make leisure time much more valuable for them and stimulate their curiosity. Obviously, forcing adolescents to join in well-organised activities rather than offering them freedom to engage in what they favour hampers their opportunities to experience enthusiastically and seek enjoyment. Moreover, facilitating self-organizing recreational activities could help the children to conquer their own potential. Playing without persuation or compulsion from others allows them to harness their imagination and other innate strengths to make the whole experience as meaningful as possible. By contrast, having to follow a kind of forceful entertainment seems to lower student's interest and even stifle their creativity.
In conclusion, although the significance of preparing forms of entertainment for teenage children to participate is unimpeachable, i think that letting them at liberty to do what they want is of paramount importance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 1615.20841683 143% => OK
No of words: 400.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.7575 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20519012697 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6125 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 506.74238477 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.439846491 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.9375 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8125 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318999125184 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946320501145 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736359078361 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180232029818 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00899480787283 0.056905535591 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.21 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 78.4519038076 172% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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