Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Some people think that the extended family is less important now than it was in the past since most families live independently. However, In my opinion, I do not agree and think that the importance of extended family has instead more important than in the past because of the following three reasons.
First of all, the importance of extended family is more now than in the past because nowadays, most parents are busy doing their job. Due to the busyness of the parents, children are literally abandoned in the home. If there is any extended family live in the home, then they can fill the gap between children and their parents by providing care and love. We can see that in our society, many children are engaging illegal activities simply by lacking love and care from their parents. On the other hand, even if parents want to take care of their children, due to their job responsibilities they often cannot present most of the time with their children. In such cases, any extended family members such as grandparents can take care of the child and prevent him or her from engaging in aberrant activities in society. In contrast, in the past, both of the parents used to have more time than now for their children. Hence, now the importance of extended family has increased than in the past.
Secondly, the importance of extended family has grown deliberately at present time than in the past because it creates a close support structure. For example, if an individual gets sick in an extended family, other members of the family support him or her. They can provide sick people better food, they can bring them to the hospital, and many more. One the other hand, today, most of the family members have to depend upon their job for their living. When a person's job terminates, other members of the extended family may take care of the expenses of the family. Which prevents him or her from going into depression due to the loss of a job. However, in past, people used to grow food on their own, and even if they did not have a job, they can live for several months without any employment. While in present, most of the families entirely depend upon the income from their job. So the importance of extended family has grown in order to create a close support structure.
In conclusion, the importance of extended family now is increased than in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 656, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...sion due to the loss of a job. However, in past, people used to grow food on their own,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68585131894 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46081027 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419664268585 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8769736211 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.85 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299894918608 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128154321367 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133529566625 0.0737576698707 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283390106482 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123253615318 0.0645574589148 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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