Write a narrative essay about (1) someone or something that influenced you.
Or (2) an object (gift/souvenir/possession … ) that is meaningful to you.
Or (3) an interesting place (village/city...) you have been to.
In my opinion, gifts are not only about their material aspects, but also their sentimental values. In that way, my watch given by my grandfather is the most meaningful object in my life.
Since I was in grade 5, I have got used to wearing a silver watch on my left wrist. My habit can be explained by some reasons. The very first motivation for my routine is that a watch is considered a reminder of my self-discipline. It can help me improve my punctuality accompanied with arranging my studying and relaxing schedule much more effectively. In addition, a watch symbolizes the precious time in our life. Time is likely a circle. Like a clock, three hands of a watch will come back to each moment in a new circle, which means twelve hours have passed and they will never come back. A watch makes me think of how to appreciate every moment in life.
Because of the above reasons, I had used a watch my mother bought since I was in grade 5. Unfortunately, three days before my National High School Exam, my old watch had some problem. Its hands did not work well, which means sometimes they worked, but sometimes they stopped working for two or three continuous hours. I thought that my watch had a problem with its battery, so I had it fixed by a watch shop. Nevertheless, its problem continued, which would challenge me a lot in my important exam. At that moment, my grandfather gave me a new nice silver one with a part of his nest-egg used for sudden business. The watch was presented to me with a sincere and loving attitude on his wrinkled face, so I could not stand shedding tears. He always cares for me in a silent but cozy way.
In a word, my currently used watch is absolutely significant for my life because of not only their functions, but also my grandfather's love and hope for myself. Moreover, it is one of the most motivating objects in my life.
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- Self Introduction 11
- Essay topics Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school What are the reasons What could be done 84
- Choose 1 of the following questions 1 IELTS essay the qualities that make someone admirable 2 Free style My idol role model 3 Free style Someone I admire An influential person 78
- Write a narrative essay about 1 someone or something that influenced you Or 2 an object gift souvenir possession that is meaningful to you Or 3 an interesting place village city you have been to 11
- Some people say that TV advertisements are helpful for viewers while others disagree Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 471, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y a circle. Like a clock, three hands of a watch will come back to each moment in...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48973607038 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67844217984 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536656891496 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7051509145 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.55 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.05 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0210792636704 0.244688304435 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00887706975375 0.084324248473 11% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0165802174082 0.0667982634062 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0229857544753 0.151304729494 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241070814709 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 12.4159519038 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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