More and more people want to own famous brands of cars, clothes and other items. What are the reasons for this? is this a positive or negative development?
Thanks to the development of technology, everyone can follow everything that they are interested in, such as fashion, cars, and others. They will update their idols’ lives or some well-known people continuously, which will elicit in their mind the desire to own plenty of luxurious items such as clothes, cars, apartments, accessories….Therefore, more and more people put a great deal of their heart into chasing an ambition that will have lots of negative effects on their lives. Not surprisingly, there are a number of reasons for the situation, but earning respect, showing social status and chasing trends are three main motives.
To begin with, it is obvious that owning famous brands of cars, clothes, and other items is to receive others’ respect. Nowadays, it is popular to judge a book by its cover, whether you can make a good first impression or not, which is dependent on your appearance. People tend to evaluate others through items that they own, such as watches, rings, customs, cars, smart phones, etc. To illustrate my point, if you have a modern phone such as the iPhone 13 pro max, which is a value measure, you will suddenly make a variety of good friends who will be by your side and listen attentively to your ideas or be ready to assist you whenever you need. The simple reason is that they are conscious of your affluent life. In contrast, more and more people are being looked down on due to their untidy looks, so there is a sentence reflecting this society's reality: "How important is appearance?".
In addition, showing glamorous cars or expensive apartments is a way to display your social status. The richer someone is, the more valuable assets they own, which is synonymous with your high level in this society. For example, some people have a good reputation as singers, actors, directors, and so on. They actually possess items that are equivalent to their position. Overall, there is no need to understand your personality or your knowledge level exactly. Everyone is inclined to pay attention to your car or your items in order to visualize your social status.
Finally, another reason is that everyone is really into imitating idols, some widespread trends . Accessing social networking rates have significantly increased every hour, so they often follow their favorite singers and buy some items like clothes similar to them and post them on Facebook to attract attention from community networks.
In conclusion, if more and more people keep thinking that they must own luxurious items unquestioningly, these bring plenty of awful consequences. More illegal activities, such as stealing and unauthorized business, are likely to occur with the goal of becoming wealthy and catching up with others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, if, look, really, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 450.0 315.596192385 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15555555556 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93902418114 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 176.041082164 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564444444444 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 711.9 506.74238477 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.6601650112 49.4020404114 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.0 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.125 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.125 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260737672481 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789424161226 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626119937369 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134372317483 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464456285191 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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