In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between
equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can
achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal
achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according
to their individual merits.
What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?
Success, social equality, and its relationship are increasing concerns in modern communities. While individuals argue that personal achievements are strongly related to egalitarian societies, the rest state that people can get more success when they freely build their dream. However, when it comes to me, I would advocate the latter.
In the first place, the preponderant reason is that every person definitely has a different definition of achievement. In other words, people have various goals in life, namely, being rich, having high status, living a pleasant life, etc. Additionally, the standard of living and thinking also varies remarkably to the human place of origin, making it impossible to allocate the same resources to get different goals. For example, my friend living in the USA chose to follow his dream to be a professor while I decided to make a living after my graduation.
In the second place, it is certain that the equal communities lack competition to make big progress. Getting the same proportion without any effort, people may gradually lose their motivation that is one of the essential elements that constitute social advancement. Needless to say, the process of competing with others help individuals build their own professional and academic success, broaden their prospect, and consequently establish an ideal society where people are paid off by their great endeavour. For instance, diligence and high productivity of their citizen are the pivotal reasons making the extensive and intensive development within 300 years.
All in all, if all factors are contemplated, it is easy to reach the conclusion that people can make their progress in an equal community, and that the relationship between those elements is quite negative.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in other words, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37906137184 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91084892835 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631768953069 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5537727009 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.166666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0833333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1666666667 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157743718272 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484118000242 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059519703292 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930842355433 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493362755634 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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