No one can deny the fact that people in my country have always accepted and celebrated cultural attributes throughout the whole history. On that ground, tradition and culture reinforce cultural values among community members such as respect, good education, personal responsibility, and etc. In this regard, some people contend that believing and accepting our ancient tradition is a part of the responsibility that people do in their lives. On the other side, there is a group of people who think that people can follow their own footsteps and act differently from old theories. Certainly, from my vantage point, the former point contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that irrefutably ancient beliefs and traditions are meant to be for good reasons which can also serve a good purpose in people’s lives. In fact, some theories represent scientific perspectives. Contrary, with modernization in the last few decades, there is a whole group of people whose beliefs get diluted, and thereby, their lives have become foreign to them which does not serve any fruitful purpose. To shed more light on it, take an example of vaccination which is given to newborns. Many parents refuse to follow this method of vaccination as they think that their children might not bear the pain at this age. However, the basic theory behind this vaccination process is to produce antibodies in newborns’ bodies so that they can fight against severe diseases in the future. Ultimately, denying and not accepting old methods of culture might lead to bad consequences in life.
Another noteworthy reason is that cultural characteristics share the sense of comfort and belongings among the community. To be more specific, it enhances the social bond and emotional connection between people whereby people can feel warmth in their lives. Drawing from my own family’s example can clarify the idea of what has been elaborated above. Like most other families in my country, my father and his brother’s family have been living together for a long time. The concept of living in a joint family is very prevalent in my country. I accept that when people live together in one house, they can apparently share happiness in each other’s lives. On top of that, whenever any of my family members are in difficulties, we always stand for each other to fortify the difficulty by joining hands together. On the contrary, people who have not accepted the old methodology of living in a family do not have anyone to share their happiness within the family in good times. Gradually, they start feeling lonely even in their own home. Admittedly, it is judicious to say that when people follow their family’s rituals, they never regret in life.
All in all, by contemplating all remarks, in spite of the fact that many people may not agree with my viewpoint, I deeply believe that people must need to follow their culture and tradition. This is because old rituals are always made of people’s benefits, and they can spread positiveness and a feeling of unity in one’s life.
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- TPO 22 Integrated Writing Task 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ood education, personal responsibility, and etc. In this regard, some people contend tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, however, if, may, so, in fact, such as, in spite of, on the contrary, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2672.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 527.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07020872865 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7343354749 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 831.6 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4154487479 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.88 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.08 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217608857946 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596941637462 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585502220628 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142730223345 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292266079768 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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