Traditionally women play the role of upbringing their children while men work outside to earn money for the family. Some people argue that women make better parents than men and that’s why they should play the greater role in upbringing children. Others, however, say that men can be as good as women in parenting.
Discuss both views. What is your point of view on this issue?
Give reasons for your answers and provide relevant examples and experience you might have.
Opinions diverge on whether a man is the primary breadwinner for working outside to earn money while woman should stay at home for child-rearing. Although this sentiment can be justified to some extent, I am at loggerheads owing to rational reasons.
Admittedly, women are of paramount importance to bring children up in light of their maternal instinct. First, the baby’s natural demand is breast-feeding. According to scientific research, kids who grow up with the mother’s milk will develop their physical health as well as immune system better than the opposite ones in light of abundant nutrition contained in breast-milk. Second, mothers have necessary personalities which are suitable for taking care of children. To be more accurate, due to the long time spent with mother in several first years, a child’s characteristics are impacted significantly by their mom; therefore, mother’s tenderness and patience play significant roles in forming up a child’s characteristics like self-esteem or compassion. As a result, a mother is an indispensable part of a nuclear family.
However, I strongly support the stance that the father’s role is as imperative as the mother's because of contributions in children’s physical and mental development. This can be explained by the fact that men are stronger and have better mobility to be constituted appropriately for training children in certain activities like riding bicycles or swimming, which are important to develop physical health as well as requisite skills. Moreover, the role of the father is tremendously valued in children's behavior orientation. Obviously, the mothers, sometimes, are indulgent and over protective towards their children, which leads to dependence in characteristics, namely “mama’s boy”. Hence, the father, with the inherent rigidity of men, seems to restrain the mother's excessive indulgence in raising children.
By way of conclusion, notwithstanding traditional perspectives bias towards the role of mothers, I ascertain that both genders are equal in children's upbringing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67524115756 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.35287297988 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630225080386 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9814844317 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.071428571 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2142857143 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239965259004 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730812250417 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442261959094 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128410617897 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238176467042 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.26 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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