Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critically important for the individuals involved in the entertainment industry and sports to maintain their life, other than the specific job they are doing with greater privacy as compared to today's time (where there is only a little room for privacy). I strongly accede with the statement: it affords freedom for them which is imperative for every human individuals during process of life. I will substantiate my position in the subsequent paragraphs mentioning several reasons.
Firstly, they can enjoy freedom in doing normal life duties as the normal people carry out in your daily life. As a result, they can clearly express their desires in the public places where they are often prohibited due to large mass of public attracted by them. For supporting example, one need a look no further than a life of famous movies star, Rajesh Hamal--an entertainer in the Nepalese movie industry. Last year, as he was growing older, he decided to start exercise through morning walk in the fresh environment. However, he was surrounded by the scores of normal people, who tend to click of photo or just interact with him. Consequently, the crowd was uncontrollable, and the nearby police had to protect him resulting in chaos situation. Musing over that fact, as we normal individuals do such exercise to enhance out health, such entertainers also has a desire to carry out privacy where they want privacy. Evidently, the need of privacy for their freedom to carry out normal duties is paramount.
Secondly, such people can go through the difficult situation or bad times without dealing with other things, may be extremely impertinent at that time. Having a life away from camera or media will surely help them to overcome such situations. The evident example can be seen in the life of my start friend, Sandeep Lamichhane ( a rising start in the field of Nepali cricket). He recently had a family problems due to dispute among them, which unknowingly reached out to the public. Eventually, an story seeking individuals, specially media persons, majorly focused on his daily routines and disturbed him every time when he was out for the court work. In addition, he was also compelled to share his personal topics during cricket related interviews, actually unnecessary to his current situation. Therefore, he felt very distressed and frustrated about invasion of his personal life in public. Sometimes, he would text me stating that had he never played cricket, he would never have been in such scenario.
Taking an account of above-mentioned considerations, it can be inferred that individuals who deployed their majority of time in entertainment of public and playing for nation deserves sometime for their other works and personal problem. Thus, it s extremely important for us (especially people and media persons) to respect their time and help them with privacy.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e of my start friend, Sandeep Lamichhane a rising start in the field of Nepali cr...
^^
Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... reached out to the public. Eventually, an story seeking individuals, specially me...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 22.412803532 219% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 30.3222958057 218% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 1373.03311258 175% => OK
No of words: 470.0 270.72406181 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11489361702 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.04702891845 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78454962496 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 145.348785872 181% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559574468085 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 419.366225166 179% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 3.25607064018 430% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6526695124 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.476190476 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.380952381 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 4.33554083885 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122528508966 0.272083759551 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346135458043 0.0996497079465 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359042267015 0.0662205650399 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759011196764 0.162205337803 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362128723571 0.0443174109184 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 63.6247240618 198% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e of my start friend, Sandeep Lamichhane a rising start in the field of Nepali cr...
^^
Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... reached out to the public. Eventually, an story seeking individuals, specially me...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 22.412803532 219% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 30.3222958057 218% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 1373.03311258 175% => OK
No of words: 470.0 270.72406181 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11489361702 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.04702891845 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78454962496 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 145.348785872 181% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559574468085 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 419.366225166 179% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 3.25607064018 430% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6526695124 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.476190476 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.380952381 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 4.33554083885 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122528508966 0.272083759551 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346135458043 0.0996497079465 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359042267015 0.0662205650399 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759011196764 0.162205337803 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362128723571 0.0443174109184 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 63.6247240618 198% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.