The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009 The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants

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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

Given is the bar graph illustrating the numbers of males and females participating in various evening courses at an adult education center in 2009 while the pie chart presents the ages of these participants.
Overall, it is evident that females were more active than males in the evening classes, with the exception of sculpture one, and the proportions of these learners increased with age.
A more detailed look at the bar chart reveals that the number of males attending the drama class was twice as many as women, at 10 people and 20 people. The number of men participating in sculpture one was more than females, at 10 people and 5 people. The figure for men taking part in the painting class was lower compared to women , at 25 people and 30 people. In contrast, the data on men attending language courses was double compared to women, at 20 people and 40 people.
Moving onto the pie chart, it can be clearly seen that the rates of participants aged under 20 and from 20 to 29 were lowest, at 5% and 11% respectively while students who were 50 years old or over accounted for the highest proportion, at 42%. In addition, the figure for participants aged from 30 to 39 was nearly half that for those in their forties, at 16% and 26% respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 89, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
...tive than males in the evening classes, with the exception of sculpture one, and the proportions of ...
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Line 2, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e evening classes, with the exception of sculpture one, and the proportions of th...
^^
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...inting class was lower compared to women , at 25 people and 30 people. In contrast...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, while, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1031.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 224.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60267857143 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64957485525 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 106.607317073 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549107142857 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.2206840993 43.030603864 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.875 112.824112599 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 22.9334400587 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342519428279 0.215688989381 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156759817032 0.103423049105 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124079025903 0.0843802449381 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214914761014 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.152506749163 0.0819641961636 186% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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