In this day and age, music plays an important role in developing the variety of cultures as well as connecting people together through it. Evidently, I strongly agree that in order to have success in helping people access to variable cultures and enhance the cohesion of them. music is the key of success. To start with ,we can see that in every sound , it represents the image of life and culture of every country which is one of the special purpose of music. To illustrate that we can give an example, when it comes to music in Korea, it is definitely enjoyed and shared widely on over the world which make Korea's cultures become impressive and attractive to people in other countries. On top of that, people are keen on listening to music which has become inspirational hobbies regardless of ages. According to some research, the old tend to considered classical music as their cup of tea whereas the young find their interest hidden in every sound and rhythm of pop music as well as modern music. Finally, music also has a purpose of transferring the thought and idea to another regardless of the difference of language and culture which is the most important factor in order to bring people together. In conclusion, music is absolutely to be preserved and plays a role as a pioneer in connecting people of all ages from the variety of cultures together
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Music
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Suggestion: ,
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, so, well, whereas, in conclusion, as well as, to start with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1119.0 1615.20841683 69% => OK
No of words: 238.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70168067227 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62099077052 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542016806723 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.5377749324 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.333333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4444444444 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4444444444 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32148281731 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135215186345 0.084324248473 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575226251839 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.32148281731 0.151304729494 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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