In a memo that appeared from the vice president of Quiot Manufacturing we can see that it mentions the fatal accidents faced by the workers of Quiot Manufacturing are 30 percent higher than those working for Panoply Industries due to their increased shift hours. After some comparative research from his end, the company's president has come to the conclusion that by reducing the shift work hours by one hour each like that of Panoply Industries would in turn reduce the peril being faced by their employees.The prompt believes increased workload is resulting in fatigue and other health problems thereby leading to accidents in workplace.However, we need to further seek evidence on this and ask few questions to validate the recommendation put forward.
First of all, is the workplace of Quiot Manufacturing and Panoply Industries roughly comparable? In other words, is the company providing a proper secured workplace for its employees who are spending three fourth's of their time in a day in the firm. It is possible that Quiot Manufacturing comparatively less regulations and work security measures in place for its workers, which is eventually making their work harder and more prone to accidents and injuries. Every company is expected to take appropriate measure and safety measures in place as a primary necessity for its workers before even establishing itself as a problem solver and as a viable company. There is also a possibility that Panoply Industries values the safety of its employees as its highest priority and is abiding by all the rules to ensure their safety.
Secondly, the question arises about the amount of physical pressure that a person might endure when working under a specific shift. Are the workers in unpredictable shifts? There is a high chance that the work being burdened on the workers of Quiot Manufacturing Firm is comparatively high and intolerable leading to eventual fatigue and sleep disorders. The shift timings might be highly unlikely and changing everyday due to which their biological cycle might be disrupted, and eventually make them inefficient and tired. This takes a toll on the work being done and increases the chances of them not focusing on their work eventually leading to injuries and problems within the firm. However, if there is a possibility that Panoply follows regulated shifts and proper work plans for its employees without burdening them with extra work, then there is a high chance that this recommendation put forward by the company's president is flawed.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on a single fact that has been less thoroughly researched. There are several unwarranted assumptions associated with it, that by simply reducing the duration of work would impact an employee's safety rather than taking into account other reasons like workspace security, work quality and stress free work, regulated shifts for employees and many other factors.If the author is able to answer these two questions and offer more evidence(perhaps in a systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of proposed recommendation for reducing the work hours in shifts to lower the accidents being faced in the company.
- The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing During the past year Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on the job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant where the work shifts are one hour shorter than our 66
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ereby leading to accidents in workplace.However, we need to further seek evidence on th...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun regulations is countable.
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Suggestion: If
...ts for employees and many other factors.If the author is able to answer these two ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2750.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 527.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21821631879 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91902165677 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 204.123752495 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487666034156 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 859.5 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 138.431595623 57.8364921388 239% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 183.333333333 119.503703932 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.1333333333 23.324526521 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25017076981 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927297339036 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106740448234 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163202939094 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939667344379 0.0628817314937 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 14.3799401198 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 48.3550499002 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 12.197005988 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 98.500998004 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 11.9071856287 227% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 509, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...he peril being faced by their employees.The prompt believes increased workload is r...
^^^
Line 1, column 640, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ereby leading to accidents in workplace.However, we need to further seek evidence on th...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun regulations is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... that Quiot Manufacturing comparatively less regulations and work security measures ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 450, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...ts for employees and many other factors.If the author is able to answer these two ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2750.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 527.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21821631879 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91902165677 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 204.123752495 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487666034156 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 859.5 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 138.431595623 57.8364921388 239% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 183.333333333 119.503703932 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.1333333333 23.324526521 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25017076981 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927297339036 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106740448234 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163202939094 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939667344379 0.0628817314937 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 14.3799401198 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 48.3550499002 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 12.197005988 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 98.500998004 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 11.9071856287 227% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.