Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
From my perspective, an adult can't be regarded as a mature adult until he/she is capable of being responsible for his/her finance, and a sensible/reasonable/desirable/advisable mindset of money, which should be established as early as possible, is critical to the building of responsibility in one's mind. So I agree with the idea that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
First of all, becoming financially responsible adults is a long process in which we need to practice in person and gain valuable experience by mistakes. I have met one roommate who hasn't possessed his own money before or had an idea about how much a student needs to spend in living. For this reason, he often struggles with how to manage his money in case of being incapable of paying for his daily expense. Consequently, his financial state is disorganized, which, furthermore, causes his failure in his academic performance. If he had learned about how to manage his money, he would be more sensible with his money so that he would accomplish his academic goal on time.
Secondly, children have more chances to make mistakes when building their own views and skills to be responsible for their finance. Everyone has their own background and characteristics, so theories and skills told by others may not be suitable for them. Therefore, learning from practicing on their own is the best way for a person to gain the capability to manage his finance, . And it is advisable that they learn at an early stage because the cost incurred by making mistakes when they are young is controllable and easy to be remedied, especially with the supervision and guidance of their parents, and the children can be prevented from doing something devastating.
Admittedly, learning about the knowledge of financial management may put some stress on children, but we can still teach them by some interesting means such as introducing them to educational TV shows and instructional games. Children will gain long term benefits from those essential skills.
In a nutshell, I hold that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02528089888 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.38618505767 2.67179642975 127% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536516853933 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.0180766029 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.785714286 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286854757812 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126696170162 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122785861113 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208043497358 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114710670308 0.0645574589148 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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