Techno corporation is our top pick for the investment this term. We urge all our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed a stellite technology has been approvd by the FTA to compete with current satellite provider. The company is techno corporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of the respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not monopoly.Thus , the new venture of technocorporation into satellite televsion will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now
The author advices its clients to invest in a new company called techno corporation, the author claims that this company is the first company in ten years that can compete with the current satellite provider and respondents who were dissatisfied with the current satalite television provider would switch to this provider and thus it will be highly beneficial for those who invest in this company.To evaluate the author's argument properly,certain uestions need to be answered first.
Firstly,as we understand from the author's words that techno corporation is a new company and as it is a reatively new company and first of its kind to compete with an existing monopoly it does not have any past records on which we can rely to evaluate how succesfull the company is or how good it is doing or how many customers it has served in the past and what its performance has been without knowing the answers to these uestions investing in this company can be risky.
Secondly,the author says that 80 percent of the respondents were dissatisfied with the current service provider and would like to shift to a new service provider if they can but the uestion is how does techno corporation know that it will be able to provide better service than the existing service provider .there is no data or research paper provided that can show or prove that their services will be betteWhat if the services tend to be worse than the existing provider in that case respondents will stop using this company's services.
Thirdly,The existing comapany is a monopoly and maybe therefore it doesnt have a competition and thats the reason their services are not so good as they have taken their customers for granted as they dont have any competition .Introduction of this company in the market may bring in competion and therefore more pressure on the existing company to provide better services .The existing company is rich and well known and more trusted company as it have been there in the market for a long time ,it might improvr its services and the new company may not be able to compete with it.
In conclusion I would like to say that the authors aurgument is based on unwarrented assumptions and lacks enough information in form of data and long explainations which is needed to properly evaluate his claim without them his claims dont hold water and cannot be trusted completely.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 1947 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.737 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.57 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 51.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 36.28 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.42 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.827 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 406.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88669950739 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69094954329 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445812807882 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 81.0 22.8473053892 355% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.083331959 57.8364921388 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 396.8 119.503703932 332% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 81.2 23.324526521 348% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.8 5.70786347227 364% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261469054302 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154770694731 0.0743258471296 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112315483435 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154770694731 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112315483435 0.0628817314937 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 42.2 14.3799401198 293% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -2.28 48.3550499002 -5% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 33.7 12.197005988 276% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.27 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.32208582834 124% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.4 11.1389221557 309% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 34.0 11.9071856287 286% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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