The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent During the same year Omni showed a significant | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.

"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent.
During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most
likely because online instruction takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University
has failed to grow and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased. Thus, to increase enrollment and solve the problem of budget
deficits at Humana University, we should initiate and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni."

The above argument says that last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by omni university increased by 50 percent.
And further says that during the same year Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenses for dormitory and classroom space, Most likely
because online instruction takes place via internet. In contrast over the past three years the enrollment at humana university has failed to grow and cost of
maintaining the university has increased. Thus, to increase enrollment and solve the problem of budget deficits at humana university , we should initiate and
actively promote online degree programs like omni.

The argument claims that in last year the enrollment of students increased by 50 percent but they fails to mention that how many students were initially enrolled
in that university. They try to say that because the program was online so there were increase in students. But actually there is no such proof showing reason
for students to join that program.Further says that Omni showed decrease in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space mostly because online instruction
take place via internet. Eventhough the university started online course but the expense of internet and getting latest computers for teachers to take lectures would
result same for the university. Even though the University thought that there is less expense but it is same after all. And salaries for teacher remain same.
There might be a reason that the university has invested in Solar panal and so the electricity is saved.

Talking about hanuman university, they say that it has failed to grow and cost of maintainig the building has increased. They assumed that the university has failed
because they are not offering online education. But there might be some other reason for them to fail. And it is obvious that if they have failed the cost for
Maintaining would be onerous.

They further suggest that to increase the enrollment and solve the problem of budget at Humana University they should initiate online program like Omni But there
is no confirmation here that after this step the university will surely grow. It is a matter of risk that even after starting online class what if students dont join this
university and ofcourse the online course is not only factor. There may be the reason that the students dont like their teaching pattern.

It is not obvious for omni too that their growth is because of online program. There might be the reason that students like their teaching pattern or students find
this university nearer than humana university .There are lot of factors for humana university to not grow like omni. There might be location issue or might that
students dont find their teaching pattern interesting. Online classes is not the only reason possible.

In sum, i find this argument unjustified. In order to convince the writer must find some better reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...rmitory and classroom space, Most likely because online instruction takes place v...
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...nstruction takes place via internet. In contrast over the past three years the enrollmen...
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... of budget deficits at humana university , we should initiate and actively promo...
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...mana university , we should initiate and actively promote online degree programs ...
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...udents increased by 50 percent but they fails to mention that how many students were ...
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Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ow many students were initially enrolled in that university. They try to say that...
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Line 8, column 159, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ly there is no such proof showing reason for students to join that program.Furthe...
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Suggestion: Further
...son for students to join that program.Further says that Omni showed decrease in expen...
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Suggestion: Further,
...son for students to join that program.Further says that Omni showed decrease in expen...
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Line 10, column 106, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
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... course but the expense of internet and getting latest computers for teachers to take lectures...
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Suggestion: don't
... starting online class what if students dont join this university and ofcourse the...
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...ne class what if students dont join this university and ofcourse the online cours...
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...ere may be the reason that the students dont like their teaching pattern. It is ...
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Message: The adjective obvious is normally used with 'to': 'obvious to omni'.
Suggestion: obvious to omni
...e their teaching pattern. It is not obvious for omni too that their growth is because of onl...
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... their teaching pattern or students find this university nearer than humana unive...
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...university nearer than humana university .There are lot of factors for humana univ...
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...iversity nearer than humana university .There are lot of factors for humana universit...
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...umana university to not grow like omni. There might be location issue or might that ...
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...re might be location issue or might that students dont find their teaching patter...
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Suggestion: don't
...location issue or might that students dont find their teaching pattern interesting...
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...t the only reason possible. In sum, i find this argument unjustified. In orde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, may, so, thus, after all, in contrast, talking about

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2508.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 484.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18181818182 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53847343499 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.415289256198 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 782.1 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8977826407 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95833333333 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 21.0 5.15768463074 407% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39953913489 0.218282227539 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117688183329 0.0743258471296 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126482681393 0.0701772020484 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135758984144 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124076965766 0.0628817314937 197% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, may, so, thus, after all, in contrast, talking about

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