The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.
"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
People should not be misled by the advertising competition between Coldex and Cold-Away, both popular over-the-counter cold medications that anyone can purchase without a doctor's prescription. Each brand is accusing the other of causing some well-known, unwanted side effect: Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness. But the choice should be clear for most health-conscious people: Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex. Clearly, Cold-Away is more effective.
In this argument the speaker recommends that, cold-away is more effective than coldex , to support this argument speaker points out that the health-conscious people choose cold-away which has been used by people and high on demand for many years, the author also cites that hospital suggest to take cold-away .but the argument is unconvincing for several reasons.
First of all, author stated that to take medicine without doctor’s prescription by saying that: coldex and cold-away ,both popular over the counter that anyone can purchase without prescription. From my point of view no one can purchase or take any medicine without doctor’s prescription, there can be many side effects of doing it , even if they both are very effective for cold, there can be some case that someone has some allergies of some products that are contained in medicines.
Secondly, author also states that people should not be misled by the advertising competition between coldex and cold-away ,he also indicated that both are popular -over -counter , but there are many medicine other than colder and cold-away which may be can be better effective in cold . there can be case that doctor prescribe other medicine and people take other medicine than these two.if this is the case the other medicine can be purchased by more people and can be chance that they are high in market. To prove this fact I want some more data to compare between.
Thirdly ,author states that each brand is accusing some well-known ,unwanted side effect, to prove that he states that colder is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and cold-away is known to cause drowsiness, but this evidence is far to vague. there can be can that people are having un wanted side effect because they hadn’t take doctor’s prescription.without right proof i can’t agree with that. to agree that I need some more information.
fourthly,author comes with the big statement that cold-away is more effective by saying: the health conscious people take always elect cold-away and which always has been on the market and is used by many hospital, this fact is dubious in many ways, firstly author has not given any data to compare , I can’t decide which is good if the particular data is not given .author also state that cold-away is selling high in market but there can be possibility that cold-away is in low price than coldex.
In sum, the author’s argument is weak is many way. To strengthen the argument the author need to provide 1) more data and fact to prove that cold-away is more effective.2) comparison between other medicines 3)need to get data from other medical 4) data of people taking other medicine than these two . To justify the claim author need to provide such information.
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- The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent During the same year Omni showed a significant 33
- People should not be misled by the advertising competition between Coldex and Cold Away both popular over the counter cold medications that anyone can purchase without a doctor s prescription Each brand is accusing the other of causing some well known unw 43
- Some studies conducted by Bronston College which is also located in a small town reveal that both male and female professors are happier living in small towns when their spouses are also employed in the same geographic area Therefore in the interest of at 65
- college student should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field 50
Comments
e-rater score report
The arguments are not right on the point
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2229 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.804 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.505 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 30.62 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.419 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.698 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.181 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... cold-away is more effective than coldex , to support this argument speaker points...
^^
Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r many years, the author also cites that hospital suggest to take cold-away .but ...
^^
Line 1, column 285, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest taking'.
Suggestion: suggest taking
...s, the author also cites that hospital suggest to take cold-away .but the argument is unconvin...
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Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...that hospital suggest to take cold-away .but the argument is unconvincing for sev...
^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t is unconvincing for several reasons. First of all, author stated that to...
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Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ion by saying that: coldex and cold-away ,both popular over the counter that anyon...
^^
Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ere can be many side effects of doing it , even if they both are very effective fo...
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Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...competition between coldex and cold-away ,he also indicated that both are popular ...
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Line 5, column 178, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ted that both are popular -over -counter , but there are many medicine other than ...
^^
Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun medicine seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much medicine', 'a good deal of medicine'.
Suggestion: much medicine; a good deal of medicine
... popular -over -counter , but there are many medicine other than colder and cold-away which m...
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Line 5, column 285, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...h may be can be better effective in cold . there can be case that doctor prescribe...
^^
Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ay be can be better effective in cold . there can be case that doctor prescribe other...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o.if this is the case the other medicine can be purchased by more people and can ...
^^
Line 7, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...more data to compare between. Thirdly ,author states that each brand is accusin...
^^
Line 7, column 67, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t each brand is accusing some well-known ,unwanted side effect, to prove that he s...
^^
Line 7, column 261, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ess, but this evidence is far to vague. there can be can that people are having un wa...
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Line 7, column 336, Rule ID: HASNT_IRREGULAR_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'hadn’t taken'?
Suggestion: hadn’t taken
...ving un wanted side effect because they hadn’t take doctor’s prescription.without right pro...
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Line 7, column 390, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ctor’s prescription.without right proof i can’t agree with that. to agree that I ...
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Line 7, column 415, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...ut right proof i can’t agree with that. to agree that I need some more information...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Fourthly
...that I need some more information. fourthly,author comes with the big statement tha...
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Line 10, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , author
...eed some more information. fourthly,author comes with the big statement that cold-...
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Line 10, column 201, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hospital seems to be countable; consider using: 'many hospitals'.
Suggestion: many hospitals
...s has been on the market and is used by many hospital, this fact is dubious in many ways, fir...
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Line 10, column 299, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...author has not given any data to compare , I can’t decide which is good if the par...
^^
Line 10, column 366, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...good if the particular data is not given .author also state that cold-away is sell...
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Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld-away is in low price than coldex. In sum, the author’s argument is weak i...
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Line 12, column 5, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...way is in low price than coldex. In sum, the author’s argument is weak is ma...
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Line 12, column 45, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun way seems to be countable; consider using: 'many ways'.
Suggestion: many ways
... sum, the author’s argument is weak is many way. To strengthen the argument the author ...
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Line 12, column 299, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ple taking other medicine than these two . To justify the claim author need to pro...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 13.6137724551 191% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2308.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00650759219 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6514046258 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438177874187 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 714.6 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.307850029 57.8364921388 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 177.538461538 119.503703932 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4615384615 23.324526521 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 5.70786347227 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.25449101796 533% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00423424991473 0.218282227539 2% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00187838878129 0.0743258471296 3% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00440840682224 0.0701772020484 6% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00311726748892 0.128457276422 2% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00443505986685 0.0628817314937 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 48.3550499002 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 12.197005988 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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