There is no doubt that it is easy for us to get touch with the celebrities' life in this time. However, everyone needs privacy space to keep himself or herself in a safe situation. Giving more opportunities to famous people which they deserve is helpful for their health, besides, in fact, there is no necessity for them to share personal life with the public.
On the one hand, too much attention they get from the public which is stressful will give no advantage for both mental and physical health. Undoubtedly, no matter what they do, countless comments and others' words are waiting for them every single day which may lead to a terrible damage. For example, Justin Bieber, an excellent Canadian singer, according to a lot of judgements from the audience, he got psychological pressure so badly, as a result, he abused drugs and suffered from anxiety when he was only sixteen years old. Furthermore, Paparazzi are always following him wherever he goes until now, he and his whole families can not enjoy the normal life which the common people can get it easily. So to prevent some mental illness, it is better for us to leave a space for the celebrities.
On the other hand, legally and ethically speaking, there is no responsibility for them to propagate their life with the public and we can not demand them to share more information. Undoubtedly, they have right to turn down to share more detail things about themselves behind the camera like what people do when they are facing a privacy attack. But someone will say they have much higher salary than most of people, it is no matter for them. Take a deep consideration, they have paid off a lot of effect and hard work to become the famous in this so comparative industry which you and me can not do it so they deserve it.
It is recognized that some celebrities try to post more personal life which can take an advantage of the popularity improvement. Although it is a best way for all of us to find some funny from it, someone seeking the media who are always present their luxury bags and expensive Jaguar cars will lead the teenagers to pursue the incorrect money value.
To sum up, the famous people should and deserve to protect the privacy for a win-win situation. They have the right to fight when their privacy is offended and they can take a break from their stressful job environment as well. Everybody’s privacy should be respected.
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- TOEFL T P O 46 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
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- TOEFL T P O 46 Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...it is easy for us to get touch with the celebrities life in this time. However, everyone ne...
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Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'terrible damage'.
Suggestion: terrible damage
...them every single day which may lead to a terrible damage. For example, Justin Bieber, an excelle...
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Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...l say they have much higher salary than most of people, it is no matter for them. Take a deep ...
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Line 7, column 145, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... popularity improvement. Although it is a best way for all of us to find some fun...
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Line 7, column 206, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'seeks'.
Suggestion: seeks
... us to find some funny from it, someone seeking the media who are always present their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, for example, in fact, no doubt, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70047169811 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57196937723 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525943396226 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0277080577 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.235294118 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9411764706 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52941176471 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160685693785 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586771651742 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560097359134 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102768409913 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0786771710794 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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