Some people believe that it is better for children to get similar jobs to their parents’ one than to choose totally different jobs from their parents’ one. I also agree with this idea and would like to explain reasons and examples to support my thought.
First of all, children are grown up while they are seeing how their parents work, so they must be more familiar with the job. In addition, they must have learned naturally the advantages and disadvantages of their parents’ job, so it would be so helpful and effective to win abilities to succeed in the job. For example, we can see many young Korean actors who have actor parents. They had no reluctance to stand in front of a camera from a child and were trained automatically by watching their parents’ training and plays. For these reasons, actors’ children have more possibilities to become successful actors than others in Korea.
Second, if children choose their parents’ vocation, they can use the business network which their parents have made. Usually these relationships are made for decades, but children can use these networks immediately and they can succeed in their businesses under the network’s help within a very short time. For instance, most doctor parents want their children to become a doctor and doctor society also help those children with many benefits to protect their inner circle. So, currently becoming a doctor without a doctor's parents is getting more difficult than before. This phenomenon is so natural in not only doctor society, but also other groups.
To sum up, we can say that it is better to choose similar jobs to their parents with many advantages, such as being familiar with the job from a child and using parents’ business network for prompt success. In this regard, I agree with the idea that having a similar job to their parents is better than having a different job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96238244514 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52832151155 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514106583072 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0204030866 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.071428571 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7857142857 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.472809551708 0.236089414692 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181965323329 0.076458572812 238% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154234602375 0.0737576698707 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.364125062197 0.150856017488 241% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153623129815 0.0645574589148 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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