It is always wrong to keep animals in captivity, for instance in zoos. How far do you share this view?
Some argue that the zoo serves no purpose, while others argue that it serves a recreational function. This is a hotly debated and contentious issue, but I am convinced that a zoo disrupts our ecological system. There are a number of reasons why I believe the zoo is worthless.
Firstly, animals are always beautiful in their natural habitat, the forest. We violate natural law when we confine animals from the forest in cages. As a result, forests lose their lovely natural environment. Caging free animals is also inhumane. Because animals used for human entertainment are deteriorating in their physical growth and having their normal reproduction interrupted, As a result, many species have become extinct. Furthermore, an animal wandering through a natural forest keeps our natural environment safe.
Secondly, many animals are unable to cope with the cages at times. Furthermore, many zoo authorities fail to provide necessary foods, proper housing, and proper treatment for the animals' survival and production. Furthermore, zoo authorities earn a lot of money to display these wild animals to the general public, but this money is not properly distributed among these wild animals. As a result, these animals suffer from a variety of diseases and a scarcity of food.
Thirdly, and most importantly, Zoo is attempting to destroy our food chain system. It is destroying the food ecosystems that nature has preserved. At the very least, children who keep animals captive for fun and entertainment form a negative impression, which is detrimental to their mental development. A safari park, which is an alternative system to a zoo in which animals get larger spaces as well as greener trees and foods, may be a better alternative than a zoo. The general public can learn about animals from these short natural parks, and in this way, we can cause less harm to wild animals and mother nature.
To conclude, the zoo is inhuman and serves almost no purpose for us while annihilating natural equilibrium.
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Suggestion: animals'; animal's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15644171779 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87325739178 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567484662577 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8394542048 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4736842105 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1578947368 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209233628822 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632465899955 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033045089656 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111733548791 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291532212212 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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