Some people believe that the ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.
Modern technology has significantly changed people’s lifestyles, including vehicles and communications, when compared to a century ago. Especially, the way people communicate with each other has changed drastically. In regard to this matter, the given prompt presents two positions: one that the ever-increasing use of technology limits the opportunities for human interactions and the other that technology improves making connections and communications with others. I mostly agree with the latter for two reasons that will be stated below. However, I do concede that technological advancement may hinder genuine interaction with others.
First of all, as communication technology has enhanced, people are able to communicate with others free of time and physical restraints. For example, in the past, people had to rely on direct meetings to talk with others and share information before the invention of the telephone and the computer. People had to make a specific appointment in regard to the meeting time and place in order to communicate with one another. On the other hand, nowadays, people are able to communicate with others anytime and anywhere. Whether a friend is in a foreign country does not matter when it comes to talking face-to-face these days, and even if the friend is not able to respond to the call, one can just leave a voice or text message. These examples show that due to the technological enhancement in communication, people are able to freely communicate with one another with seldom restrictions of time and place.
Secondly, besides the freedom from chronological and physical obstacles, technological advancement has provided broader opportunities to communicate with a variety of people. For instance, people nowadays are able to utilize social platforms such as Facebook and Instagram to talk and contact not only their friends but also foreign people who share similar interests. Moreover, people may communicate with their friends and strangers via online games including StarCraft and Overwatch, which increases the diversity in one’s communication. On the other hand, it was almost impossible to meet and talk with foreigners, or even strangers, since people’s scope of communication was severely limited to their hometown. Only affluent people were able to travel to foreign countries, and ordinary people were hardly able to think of traveling abroad. These examples present that technological improvement has widened the opportunity to communicate and interact with a variety of groups of people, which was inconceivable in the past.
Admittedly, the development of technology would likely impede one’s opportunity to engage in genuine interaction with others. For example, as people are able to have face-talks or messengers to communicate with others, they are less likely to engage in direct interactions and communications with their friends or acquaintances, which hampers their chance to form more intimate and interactive relationships with their peers. Moreover, even if they do often meet with their friends, they are obsessed with checking Snapchat or Facebook feed lines while in the meeting. This example presents that technological enhancement may inhibit the chance to be involved in energetic and interactive relationships with others. Even if they do have the chance to meet with friends, it is the technology that ironically disturbs the communication with one another.
In conclusion, technology provides people with novel and better ways to communicate and connect with others due to the two reasons that are discussed above. However, it should not be denied that the improvement in communication technology may hinder having genuine and dynamic interactions with others, which deteriorate the quality of communication.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 94.0 58.6224719101 160% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3217.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 578.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56574394464 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90322654589 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18276707064 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446366782007 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1029.6 704.065955056 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7243195836 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.041666667 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.464261232528 0.243740707755 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167708315022 0.0831039109588 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829706572648 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.315571922172 0.150359130593 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586057554223 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.8420337079 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 100.480337079 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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